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    ---LANCER---
    - U'tlun'ta -
    Alignment: Chaotic Evil
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    Strength: B
    Endurance: A
    Agility: B
    Mana: C
    Luck: D
    Noble Phantasm: A

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    Character details
    Likes: Liver, Children (unironically)
    Dislikes: Birds, Unkempt nails (unironically)
    Talents: Singing and dancing
    Natural Enemy: Stone Man



    Class Skills \
    ~ Magic Resistance: [B]
    A Servant's ability to resist thaumaturgical effects. At B-rank, spells of four verses or lower are completely nullified. Even when Lancer is the target of high-thaumaturgy or great rituals, it is difficult for her to be affected.

    Lancer was terrible witch when she alive, thought for the longest time to be invulnerable. Even the magics of the Native Americans and their spirits could not harm her. Modern magi likely won't fare much better.

    Personal Skills \

    ~ Stoneskin: [A]
    Less of a skill and more a birth anomaly, it is a trait shared amongst those born from stone. Lancer's skin is harder than any mineral one could bury up from the earth. Even when she was assailed with countless spears and arrows, these attacks would bounce off her skin like pebbles. Her only weak point was in the place where her heart was hidden.

    Possessing the highest rank of [Stoneskin], Lancer cannot be harmed by attacks below A-rank that do not specifically aim for the heart in her left hand.

    ~ Shapeshift: [B-]
    The technique transforming one's appearance by borrowing the bodies and appearances of others.

    For Lancer to use this, she must first abandon her spear then stab someone with her nail before taking on their disguise. The disguise will be imperfect, as Lancer will not inherit their voice or mannerisms, forcing her to stay reserved while shapeshifted. She is also incapable of using her spear in this form, making it only useful for recon purposes and ambushes. Lastly, Lancer will retain the ability to shapeshift into anyone her nail has stabbed for the duration of the war. If classed as an Assassin, Lancer could presumably take the forms of others with no discernable imperfections. And if classed as a Caster, she could even take the form of animals.

    Lancer cannot shapeshift into forms she acquired prior to her summoning. Considering such, it is likely that her current form is the body she was born into the world with.

    ~ Geomancy: [A]
    An ancient type of sorcery that revolves around the manipulation of earth. Since the day she was born from stone, Lancer was already a master of this magic. Her prowess was at the level where she could pick up and heave giant boulders with ease, and make the earth underneath her feet sink. Her powers so awe-inspiring, some natives took to calling her "Earth Goddess.

    Though "Stone Witch" was a far more commonly used epithet.

    Noble Phantasm
    Noble Phantasms \
    Spearfinger -Blood-red Spear of the Ogress-
    [Anti-unit] B (Range: 1/Target: 1 person)
    If there was one thing the Cherokee feared about the ogress U'tlun'ta, it was her spearfinger. Longer than a dagger and blacker than obsidian, the nail which engrossed her entire finger could steal a liver from a child so swift and subtle, the child wouldn't realize a thing until the world had already become dark.

    But that is a Noble Phantasm for a different U'tlun'ta. Most likely a Caster or Assassin.

    The U'tlun'ta contained within the Lancer class wields her Spearfinger in her hands. It is a manifestation of not only her lengthy nail but the lives it took, turning its blade blood-red in color. Just like her, it possesses the attributes of [Stone Skin] and cannot be damaged by anything weaker than a A-rank attack or Noble Phantasm. U'tlun'ta is capable of using her original Spearfinger by dismissing her spear, though she cannot wield both at the same time, and the finger will be less effective in both ability and efficiency than if she were an Caster or Assassin.

    To fool others, U'tlun'ta typically wields her spear in her right hand to make them think that is where her heart is.

    Monolith of Elihino
    -Earth Mother's Stony Embrace-
    [Anti-army] A+ (Range: 1-5 Target: 1-50 people)
    U'tlun'ta came from the earth. One could say the same for every person on the planet, but none so literal as Spearfinger. She was born from the Earth Mother's embrace, brought into this world with powers beyond what man could comprehend, capable of moving stone as seamlessly as a modiste wove cloth. Still, she has never been as close to the earth than the time when it held her inside its womb. From this experience which she herself barely remembers is what this Noble Phantasm derives from.

    Stabbing the ground with Spearfinger, the spear sinks into it while its owner calls the Earth Mother's name. With Spearfinger at its core, a monolithic stone golem whose body stops at its lower torso rises from the earth. Its appearance is that of a beautiful solemn woman, presumably in the likeness of Elihino. The golem proceeds to go on a rampage, causing tremors by striking the earth with its fist, raising stalagmites by slapping the earth with its hand, shooting stalactites from its mouth, and forcing the ground to break apart by singing.

    The most devastating and final move in the golem's arsenal is its "embrace." Grabbing a victim, it hugs them to its breasts and self-destructs it core, resulting in a explosion equivalent to an [Anti-Army] attack, and essentially vaporizing the person it held. Since U'tlun'ta's spear acted as its core, it will not return to her after the golem has been destroyed. She will be forced to retreat until she reconstruct the spear through her magical energy.


    Lore
    Lancer's true name is U'tlun'ta. Though, she is better known by the name given to her by the Cherokee Indians - Spearfinger. An evil ogress who preyed on unsuspecting victims by disguising as their friends and loved one, she - like her nemesis, the Stone Man - had a love for livers. The livers of young children especially. Ironically, she loved children, and played with them gleefully when in the form of an elderly woman. She especially loved eating the livers of young mothers, taking on their appearance, and mothering their children, sometimes for years on end. It seems U'tlun'ta inherited some of Elihino's maternal instinct, perhaps as a result of being a stone child. This instinct often clashed with her predatory nature, and played a large part in her eventual death. In spite of her heinous acts and disregard for human life, there is a chance the Stone Witch might have been a good mother.

    But "what might have been" is just meaningless hindsight in the end. U'tlun'ta was a liver-eating, child murdering monster. It was through the foresight of the Truth Teller that the heart in her left hand was revealed. And when she was finally slain, nobody would disagree that justice was done. U'tlun'ta has no regrets about how her life ended. Her demise was thoroughly justified in her eyes.

    Though, if she had a wish, it would be to spend more time with children.


    ---edit---
    Changed Gyromancy to Geomancy. Yeah, I got the two confused...
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    Nice seeing another Native American sheet around here. Judging from the FC, I thought she might've been a Caren Ortensia Demi-Servant at first, given the last one you made. But no.

    She seems honestly very powerful, with high stats and Skills that could easily be Noble Phantasms in their own right (especially Stoneskin). Isn't Gyromancy a form of divination based on spinning around in a circle, though? I think you might mean Geomancy (Geo being earth). Though I might be wrong, since my only knowledge of the art comes from the "It was foretold by GYROMANCY!" line from Silent Hill.

    Spearfinger sounds pretty much just a pure 'weapon' NP without any special abilities. Regarding durability, most Noble Phantasms seem nigh-indestructible anyway so I don't think that's so big a deal. Given the lore you gave I could easily see it having some kind of pseudo-Gae Bolg 'teleports spearhead into target's chest to rip out their liver' sort of attack, but she's already powerful enough as is so that's not really necessary.

    Finally, I liked her last NP a lot. Golem summon, but it's creative and very different then the other instance of such in the Nasuverse (Adam).

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    After seeing that Masamune a page back, I thought I'd try and make my own Pseudo-Servant.

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    Class: Saber
    True Name: Lugh
    Alignment: Lawful Neutral (With repressed Chaotic tendencies)
    Place of Origin: Ireland

    Strength- B+
    Endurance- B
    Agility- A
    Mana- B
    Luck- D
    NP- A

    Height/Weight: 172cm/58kg
    Likes: Board Games
    Dislikes: Surprise Attacks
    Talent: Training, Simultaneous Mastery
    Natural Enemy: Cu Chulainn

    Class Skills:
    • Magic Resistance (B) - Cancel spells with a chant below three verses. Even if targeted by High-Thaumaturgy and Greater Rituals, it is difficult for him to be affected.


    Personal Skills:
    • Divinity (E) - The measure of whether one has Divine Spirit aptitude or not. Lugh was a demi-god in life and ascended to the rank of a god after his death and became their king; however he merged again with a human upon summoning, thus leaving Saber with a very low level of divine potential.
    • Honourable Warrior (B) - A skill for fighters who despite deceit. Both Lugh and Bazett were warriors who wished for fair fights, and refused to lay down before their enemies. When facing someone that fights in a cowardly manner or uses trickery, Saber gains a 'Rank-Up' to all parameters except Luck.
    • Rune Magic (B) - Knowledge about this type of Magecraft that originated in northern Europe. Saber has the capacity to use the 18 original runes. Although Lugh never used these himself, his host body has.
    • Prana Burst (Lightning) (A) - An increase in performance caused by infusing one's weapons and body with magical energy and instantly expelling it. Simply put, recreating the effect of a jet burst by expending large amounts of prana. In Saber's case, her skin blackens as her body takes on the appearance of being electrified.
    • Wisdom of Tuatha Dé Danann (A) - Intellect and talent brought forth from a cult of mastership. Whether in tale-telling, swordcraft, or any number of other skills, Saber is an expert in them. Saber's variety of skills is so great that she was admitted into the Tuatha Dé Danann, despite the order already have members who could individually do what she was capable of. Should she confront someone she deem to be worthy, she can bring out their latent potential in school of talent to its maximum level.


    Noble Phantasm

    Raksasa Penghancur The Eye-Sealer (Anti-Unit) (D) - The stone Lugh used to kill his father Balor, king of the fomorians. When thrown, damage increases with distance and momentum accumulating especially when a large target is hit and falls with high impact, basically giving Saber the Giant Slayer skill equivalent. It's most effective used against a target who possessing Mystic Eyes or Pure Eyes. When struck, alongside actually crushing their eyes, their abilities will be permanently removed from the user. Even if the targets eyes and sight are restored, their power held within them is lost forever.

    Fragaratch Gouging Sword of the War God (Anti-Unit) (D~A)


    Lore

    Lugh the High King was born to Cian of the Tuatha Dé Danann, and Ethniu, daughter of Balor of the Fomorians. Balor was the king of the Fomorains who possessed a powerful predecesor to the Mystic Eyes of Death Perception - who could actualise death of an object by merely looking at it.

    Balor heared a prophecy that he would be killed by his grandson. To avoid his fate, he locked his only daughter, Ethniu, in a tower on Tory Island to keep her from becoming pregnant. One day, Balor stole a magical cow. A man called Cian, who was guarding the cow for Goibniu, sets out to get it back. With the help of the druidess Biróg and the sea god Manannán, Cian enters the tower and finds Ethniu. After a night together she became pregnant and gives birth to three sons. Balor attempted to drown the boys in the sea, but one is saved and is raised as a foster-son by Manannán. This child was Lugh.

    As a young man Lugh travels to join the court of king Nuada of the Tuatha Dé Danann. He offers his services first as a Wright and then as a smith, a champion, a swordsman, a harpist, a hero, a poet and historian, a sorcerer, and a craftsman, but is rejected as the Tuatha Dé Danann already have someone with each skill. But when Lugh asks if they have anyone with all those skills simultaneously, the doorkeeper has to admit defeat, and Lugh joined the court.

    Lugh eventually became king of the Tuatha Dé Danann and lead them in the second Battle of Mag Tuired against the Fomorians, who are led by Balor. Balor kills Nuada with his eye. Lugh kills Balor by casting a sling, through his eye. Balor's ruptured eye destroys the Fomorian army and was the destroyed by Lugh.

    Later on, when the sons of Tuireann, Brian, Iuchar and Iucharba, kill his father, Cian Lugh set them a series of "Labours" to repent - with the purpose of killing them in the proces. They achieve them all, but are fatally wounded in completing the last one. Despite Tuireann's pleas, Lugh denies them the use of one of the items they have retrieved, a magic pigskin which heals all wounds. They die of their wounds, and Tuireann dies of grief over their bodies. Lugh died of old age. He became known as the greatest king in the history of Ireland and after he died, he ascended to godhood and became the sun god known as the 'Father of Light'.

    Although once a mortal hero, he became a king of gods upon his death and a fully fledge divine spirit. It is impossible to summon Lugh in full as a servant. Due to these complications with his summoning, Lugh has become a pseudo-servant with his soul manifesting inside a Magus who currently wields his sword. The magus is Bazett Fraga McRemitz.

    As a Pseudo-Servant, the combined existence that is Saber is neither Lugh or Bazett - combining strengths and weaknesses, showing a power that is not that of the original servant.

    Lugh has decided to take a back seat so to speak and allow Bazett to command their shared body with her usual temperament - the constant company helping her with her loneliness issues although it is a nature she finds bothersome. During times of intense duress or excitement, Lugh's repressed personality comes forth acting haughty and arrogant.

    Due to Lugh's fatherly feelings towards his son Cu Chulainn and Bazett's own more romantic feelings, she would stay far away from him in every respect as Bazett and Lugh do not want to discuss the subject with each other.
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    Fragarach is a given, but surely you can scrounge up a few other Phantasms?
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    Lugh had a spear that would be only usable in the Lancer class, though I could use that sling...

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    Alright I done added the sling as an NP. He also had a hound and horse as well, but they'd be better suited for the rider class, so I left them out.
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    What's this? An Irish Mythology Servant that isn't Lancer? Blasphemy.

    Seriously though, the idea of Bazett as a Demi-Servant with Lugh works amazingly well, especially since she even has some of Lugh's own blood in her lineage (which helped as a catalyst to summon Cu). Having a human body is also a very handy way of getting past the whole 'no Divine Spirits' rule.

    One of Lugh's epithets was even 'Ildánach' (Skilled in many arts) so a 'Combo-Skill' ala Wisdom Of Divine Gift definitely works for him. Prana Burst (Lightning)... I presume he was god of lightning, amongst other things. Not the most familiar with Celtic myths (in fact, what I do know is pretty much entirely from Fate).

    NPs are a little underwhelming though. Fragarach is already from canon while Raksasa Penghancur is... a stone, albeit a magically enhanced, giant slaying one. The Mystic Eye sealing aspect definitely adds some much-needed flavor but still... comes off as a little lacking. Though I understand there isn't much else you could give Lugh while staying faithful to the chosen Class. He'd make the most sense as a Lancer, but then you wouldn't be able to include Fragarach, which is a must-have given the Demi-Servant aspect.

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    Fuck it, imma give it a go too.
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    Ereshkigal



    Alignment: True Neutral
    STR: C
    END: C
    AGI: E
    MAG: A
    LUCK: A
    NP: EX

    Class Skills

    Territory Creation (EX):
    The skill to build a special terrain that is advantageous to oneself as a magus. As the divine ruler of the dead, Ereshkigal has the power to call the underworld into existence as her territory. This is reflected in her Noble Phantasm.

    Item Construction (B): The skill to manufacture magical items. Caster mainly uses this skill to create golems for the souls under her command to inhabit and animate.

    Personal Skills

    Goddess’s Divine Core (EX): A skill that possessed by those who are a perfect goddess from birth. A composite Skill that comprises the Skill Divinity, preserves the absoluteness of the mind and the body, repels mental interference and prevents the body from changes and growth. As one of the oldest gods in the world, Ereshkigal still retains enough power to pass this skill onto her vessel.

    God of the Dead (A+):
    A skill that denotes one who rules over the dead. It allows for absolute command of dead souls to use as familiars in the Grail War. As things that should not be alive in the world, however, outside of the underworld, the pressure to maintain them is immense, though as they cannot be killed (being as they are already dead), they are incredibly dangerous to deal with. In addition, Caster can raise corpses to use as an army to overpower and consume the living. There is no necromancer stronger than the queen of the dead.

    Eres-ki-gal - Queen of the Great Earth (A): The translation of Ereshkigal’s name from Sumerian, the Queen of the Great Earth. By using the power of her name, it allows Caster to make use of powerful Earth-element magic, even spells that have been lost from modern times. As a goddess, it is natural that she is able to use divine words for her spellcasting.

    Noble Phantasm


    Irkalla
    Seven Gates of the Underworld


    Anti-Land, EX: Ereshkigal’s Noble Phantasm; the land she ruled over in her capacity as the queen of the dead. It is the territory claimed by the goddess turned via her magic into a powerful bounded field, protected by seven impenetrable gates. The only way to pass the gates is by stripping oneself of one’s weapons, armour and clothing, leaving them naked, unarmed and at Ereshkigal’s mercy once inside. Within, the world has become replaced by Irkalla, the underworld, a dismal and dreary place where the light does not reach, inhabited only by ghosts and corpses. Here, Ereshkigal passes judgement from her throne, and her rule is absolute. Calling the underworld to the surface is an act that requires an immense amount of power, so this is a rather impractical Noble Phantasm, despite its strength.

    Spoiler:
    Likes: Being left alone
    Dislikes: Nergal, the sun
    Talents: Administering justice
    Natural Enemy: Ishtar

    The goddess of the underworld from Mesopotamian mythology, and the older sister of the goddess Ishtar. She has a rather strained relationship with her sister, upon Ishtar barging her way into Irkalla, threatening to tear open its gates, Ereshkigal imprisoned her, forcing her consort at the time, Dumuzid, to take her place, and thus yet another of Ishtar’s favourites reached a sticky end.

    Here summoned into the body of the priest Kirei Kotomine, much to her surprise, however his nature as basically a corpse animated by a curse makes him something of an ideal host for her. She doesn’t seem to mind being summoned into a male body, and as a Pseudo Servant, it is her personality that is in charge, though the warped nature of her host’s mind has made her more cruel and deviant than she would otherwise be. She would probably keep to herself in a war, however if Ishtar or one of her favourites is involved, Ereshkigal will not hesitate to utterly ruin them in both this life and the next.
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    Well, I'm really not a fan of the "gods as Servants" concept, but I like this Ereshkigal! I might just suggest replacing both "God of the Dead" and "Queen of the Great Earth" with High-Speed Divine Words A+, perhaps with a note that she specialises in necromancy and Earth-aligned magic.
    Minor (possible) nitpick: did you mean "divest", perhaps, instead of "divulge"?

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    I always thought that a necromancer is a good theme for a Caster, but I don't know any hero that is specifically know for that.

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    First necromancer that comes to mind (that isn't a god) would be Skuld.
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    Skuld is a great example of a necromancer in the modern sense. For a classical necromancer - that is, someone who obtains knowledge from the dead, not someone who reanimates corpses -, there's the Witch of Endor, from the Old Testament.

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    ---RULER---
    - Adam: King of Humanity -

    Alignment: True Neutral
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    Strength: A+
    Endurance: A++
    Agility: A
    Mana: A
    Luck: B+
    Noble Phantasm: EX

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    Height/Weight: 180CM/ 62KG


    [/SPOILER]
    Character details
    Likes: Humans
    Dislikes: Extinction
    Talents: Gardening
    Natural Enemy: Gaia


    Class skills:

    ˇ Magic Resistance (A): Cancel spells of A-Rank or below. In practice, the Servant is untouchable to modern magi, so it would not be an exaggeration to title the Servant a "Magus Killer".

    ˇ True Name Discernment (A): Status information such as one's identity, Skills and Parameters is automatically revealed when directly encountering a Servant. In regards to servants with rank in Divinity, a luck check is required.

    Personal Skills:

    ˇ The Seed of Alaya [EX] An ability reserve for the one who existed before all other. It is a direct connection between parent and child, which case Ruler, himself, is able to tap and access the counter force. One that marked his existence the origin of humanity. This skill gives him infinite knowledge ranging from skills to magecraft that been passed down from humankind since the time of his death. Due to the nature of his existence, such knowledge stemming from Divine spirits and demi-gods are unreachable for him. He perceives all forms of future dictating humanity’s survival.

    However, if there’s a single fault, it’s that just as the nature of the skill will only give him as much backing from the counter force as needed to deal with the threat at hand.

    ˇ Unified Language of Humanity [B] (False) As the first being capable of speech, Adam as gave the knowledge of words to those after him. His words were the original concept that allows humankind to communicate with one another and therefore is seen as the birth of all language. He has the highest authority as the first human. Any command or request utter from his lips is treated without disobedience, not towards Servants but towards humans within the general vicinity.


    Noble Phantasm

    Human Boundary within Reach
    Fortissimo: God’s Cauldron

    {Anti – World}
    Rank: EX
    Range/Target - ???
    If there is an absolute truth, it is the undeniable potentially Mankind has that will surpass the laws of the world they are born in. A noble phantasm that has no shape but can be realized through the will of Ruler himself. It embodies the physical force of Alaya as an apocalyptic weapon meant to encompass all of Humanity’s destructive nature to achieve absolute survival.

    Such is the nature of humanity which can only consume and thrive to continue its existence.

    A conceptual weapon can only target Phenomenal that exists outside of human logic by enforcing the laws of man unto itself. All forms of mysteries eaten away by the common sense of man. If humankind does not see it as existing nor within its comprehension of reality, such substance will be wiped clean from the worlds in a single swipe.

    A noble phantasm born from Adam’s wish for human survival alongside the hate he holds towards Gaia and all of her children within sight.


    Lore
    Ruler’s true name is Adam, Father of Man.

    Despite the text spoken from bibles concerning his birth from God, as interpretation by mankind, he was the first human created from the soils of Gaia and virtually created the component called Alaya at the time of his creation. It was a miracle. He existed as a lonely creature who had no companion of his own to share his being with as phantasm beast rained throughout the world. It was by that default of being the only one of his kind that Adam chose to rule this garden for his own.

    During his youth, Adam represented traits of all human nature of both good and bad. However longer he lived the boy was always alone. In an act to destroy his state of Lonesome, Adam ripped his own ribs out and planted them into the soil, recreating the process by which gave birth to him and produce the first miracle by human hands – Eve.

    It was at that moment Gaia witness the act of man and saw her death with the cancerous of humanity living on her corpse. In response to Adam’s miracle, Gaia screamed and called upon foreign forces to wipe out Adam’s descendants after her death. Adam experienced a vision of his own at that moment and witness the end of his species in the millenniums to come.

    In hopes to allow his kind to thrive and no longer experience the emptiness of loneliness, Adam made a wish – a pact to man of the future. A desire to allow their survival at all cost at the expense of his being. It was then he unknowingly made a pack to Alaya who was born from his existence and before his death, Adam stripped his being from the world and resided as part of Alaya. He essentially became the first Counter Guardian and a slave to his own creation.

    He is a servant that has not truly died but does not live simultaneously. He can be summoned as any class except for berserker although the cost of mana upkeep will more than likely kill any master foolish enough to summon him.


    This is just some servant I made long ago, and since I’ve been reading through this thread, I decided to put him here. Yep… he’s broken.
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    Dalorian: Very interesting Servant you've got there. Incredibly hax, but as the first human in a world where 'older = better' is a law of nature, I'd say he more then deserves it. Seed Of Alaya is pretty much his version of Arcuied's Ultimate One combined with Chiron's Wisdom Of Divine Words, which certainly fits. Given how powerful it is I'd say you could easily ranked it as [EX]. Why the (False) variantfor Unified Language, though? Given the lore, I don't see any reason why it wouldn't be a 'true' version or what that would even mean in this context.

    Fortissimo is Chuuni as all heck, which is clearly what you were aiming for, so no criticism there. It would help if you gave it some kind of visual description though, since as it is it's a little hard to picture. You say it's a Conceptual Weapon but is it a sword? A beam? Or something else?

    One thing I'd say is I don't know if he really needs such high stats. Even with his status of 'first human' Adam was never known as a physical powerhouse or anything. Gilgamesh, who occupies a similar high status in mythology (and whose legend even parallels Adam's in some ways, like being 'born' in a divine garden) has straight Bs at best. It's your decision, though. You could justify giving him higher stats without much trouble (as I said, 'first human' = OP) but I just don't think it's necessary given his already really powerful stats and Skills.

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    Oh, and I LOLed at his Talent being listed as 'Gardening'.

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    His NP originally can come into any form of weaponry created by humankind. As for the stats themselves, I did it to emphasize as him being the 'Ultimate human' in a sense. His original stats are all A-rank without the pluses considering those are added in due to his Seed of Alaya skill. As for the False for Unified Language, I didn't want to wank him to hard considering everything else I added to him.

    Also on a side note - The Adam I'm portraying is a prototype and since mankind generally grew weaker after him, I figured it would make sense that he be the perfect human while all others degraded from him. He isn't technically dead nor alive in a way considering he and Alaya are one in the same.
    Last edited by Dalorian Riften; July 13th, 2016 at 08:16 PM.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Dalorian Riften View Post
    His NP originally can come into any form of weaponry created by humankind. As for the stats themselves, I did it to emphasize as him being the 'Ultimate human' in a sense. His original stats are all A-rank without the pluses considering those are added in due to his Seed of Alaya skill. As for the False for Unified Language, I didn't want to wank him to hard considering everything else I added to him.
    Any form of manmade weaponry? So, what, he can invoke it in the form of an F50 bomber or Nuclear missile? Damn, that's freaking hardcore. Can't say it's not fitting, though. (And it'd be more of a visual effect anyway since an NP on its own is already far beyond any modern weaponry)

    Fair enough regarding the stats. I wasn't sure if the + modifiers were due to Seed Of Alaya or what he had in 'base' form, so to speak. The latter makes more sense.

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    Also, I suppose you could justify him having the (False) variant of Unified Language given that he wouldn't have actually conceptualized it as language, since he was the only human around and there wouldn't be anyone else to express himself to. There was only his thoughts and the world. You could say the actual Unified Language arose later when people had to communicate amongst each other and express shared ideas. Not really sure if this makes sense or not. Just putting it out there.

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    I feel like

    Quote Originally Posted by mewarmo990 View Post
    just a fyi, the "(False)" label doesn't have a consistent meaning.

    And for a very long time only one skill used it and not in the way you're describing.
    this is relevant to say again

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    I liked the Adam lore.
    Regarding stats, maybe a high level in Natural Body could justify well rather than super high stats.

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    Honestly I was considering using Natural body at first rather than Unified Language but I figured as the first human as well as humanity's prototype, he'd start off high to show that all others merely degraded from him as a result. I'll change it later on then. Currently working on a Cain and Eve servant sheet atm.
    Es schaeumt das Meer in breiten Fluessen Am tiefen Grund der Felsen auf,
    Und Fels und Meer wird fortgerissen In ewig schnellem Sphaerenlauf.
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    Auf freiem Grund mit freiem Volke stehn.
    Zum Augenblicke duerft ich sagen
    Verweile doch du bist so schon――
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    Atziluth――
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    Quote Originally Posted by Dalorian Riften View Post
    Honestly I was considering using Natural body at first rather than Unified Language but I figured as the first human as well as humanity's prototype, he'd start off high to show that all others merely degraded from him as a result. I'll change it later on then. Currently working on a Cain and Eve servant sheet atm.
    Understandable. Adam lived like, centuries of years?

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    I made it so that in the nasuverse, Adam lived for a very long time considering his lifespan was vastly longer than most. Also I wouldn't say he 'lived' but still lives on through Alaya so his case is similar to Saber when she made the deal with the world.
    Es schaeumt das Meer in breiten Fluessen Am tiefen Grund der Felsen auf,
    Und Fels und Meer wird fortgerissen In ewig schnellem Sphaerenlauf.
    Herr, verehren Das sanfte Wandeln deines Tags.
    Auf freiem Grund mit freiem Volke stehn.
    Zum Augenblicke duerft ich sagen
    Verweile doch du bist so schon――
    Das Ewig-Weibliche Zieht uns hinan.
    Atziluth――
    Res novae――Also sprach Zarathustra

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