Create-A-Servant 2

[SleepMode]

de Molay as Avenger. de Payens as Saber.

Thanks for the suggestion, I'll get to work right away.

[Historia]

maybe I'm just oversensitive

yes

and yes, im definitely an asshole. no thanks are necessary.

[You]

thanks

[WhatShouldNotBe]

No, this is Roa and Arc

Wait......

what's your hang up. nobody's attacking you.

read the ulster cycle, it's that simple

Is this Gally? It has to be. That snarky assholish attitude....

id recognize it anywhere.

Well I can't say if that's your intent, but to me almost all your posts seem to be put out in a snarky or dismissive way, even if the actual content is innocuous. The "here's an idea" part for instance, definitely reads to me as vaguely contemptuous, as if the poster is spelling out something that my feeble idiotic brain couldn't possibly comprehend on its own.

Maybe I'm just oversensitive (it's infamously hard to accurately ascertain tone online after all), so I'll try to be a little more charitable around you in the future and not jump at the first thing I find offense-worthy.

And the cycle continues....

[Bird of Hermes]

Probably needs more time for polish but screw it. I'm not going to be able to put in the same depth as Daneel with a mini-fic and all so I'll just settle for my usual standards.


Source: Original Artist's Pixiv Account

Class: Caster
True Name: Abe no Seimei "Dark Ikeman"
Alignment: True Neutral
Place of Origin: Japan (Heian Period)

Parameters:

STR: C
END: D
AGI: E
MGI: A++
LCK: B
NP: C

Height: 172cm
Weight: 69kg
Likes: Humans, Pranks, Pretty Girls, Himself
Dislikes: Tamamo-no-Mae, Shuten Douji
Talent: Astrology
Natural Enemy: Ashiya Doman, Solomon, Merlin?
Attribute: Man
Traits: Human, Divine
Armament: Sword, Staff

Class Skills:

Item Construction: -
A Caster-class Skill. It is the Skill to manufacture magical items, from implements of war to items for daily use. Also, this Skill requires time to gather components and manufacture items.

Caster would normally be capable of creating powerful Mystic Codes of all kinds that surpass those created with modern Magecraft but due to his summoning ability, this skill has been lost..

Territory Creation: A
A Caster-class Skill. It is the Skill to build a special terrain that is advantageous to oneself as a magus, such as for the purpose of collecting mana. Creation of a 'Temple', which is superior to a 'Workshop', becomes possible if given enough time. The area he creates is a superb working environment and a very comfortable working area. If anything, it's difficult finding the willpower to ever leave this great place. Caster certainly doesn’t want to.

Personal Skills:

Onmyōdō: EX
Knowledge of Japanese thaumaturgy, one of the great ritual arts of the east. Caster created a branch that utilises the Chinese philosophies of the Six Elements as well as the duality of Yin and Yang as its foundation. Caster specialises in; Divination, Exorcism and creating powerful Familiars such as the Twelve Guardian Generals that are comparable to the 7s Demon-Gods of Solomon.

At his rank, Caster is capable of perceiving the past and future. In addition, he can summon and dispel spiritual bodies outside the flow of time easily and easily locate people or objects that are believed to be lost to the World. In truth, his abilities are hindered by his class container and he cannot act at his full potential.

Protection of the Dragon Princess: A+
The first gift Caster received in his youth from an infant dragon - the daughter of the Dragon King, a blessing that invites favour of the natural world. In the case of Caster it grants one resistance against disease, poison, curses and grants eternal youth to its owner, though as a Servant the latter is useless to him.

Pure Eyes of Soul Perception: B
Also known as simply 'Blue Eyes'. The ability to see that which normally cannot be seen. A gift Caster received in his youth from an infant dragon - the daughter of the Dragon King. He possesses set of medium grade Pure Eyes that allow him to "Hear the inner voices of people". It allows him to hear the surface thoughts of any individual that does not resist mental interference of the same level. Additionally, these Pure Eyes are always active.

Shapeshifting: D
A Skill that refers to both borrowing bodies and appearance change. It is a method used by the millenary spirits of foxes and badgers of China. It is also one of the abilities of a Vampire.

By using the techniques of the Kitsune inherited on his mother's side, he is able to alter his form seamlessly. Although he does not naturally possess fox ears or nine tails; he has them nonetheless, apparently to annoy a certain wannabe housewife.

Noble Phantasms

Star of the Sage: Seal of Abe no Seimei

Five Elemental Arrays

Type: Anti-Unit (Anti-Army)
Rank: B
Range: 100
Max Targets: 1~100 People

The fabled 'Star of Seimei', a five pointed pentagram figure created by Caster to express the elements. It functions as a magic circle that can be cast with gesture alone which amplifies the power of his spells. It is a simple sign roughly a metre in diameter that can be cast in the air.
When invoking it's True Name, the sign can generate and fire five beams of energy of the primary elements (Fire, Water, Earth, Air and Void) from each point of the star. Or alternatively a single blast of energy that is at an 'Anti-Army' scale.
Although it is possible to use each element as a catalyst to simulate True Ether from the Age of Gods, Caster himself cannot do it. Not because it isn't possible but he simply can't be bothered to look into it.

Taizan Fukun

Ritual of the Shinigami

Type: Anti-Self
Rank: C
Range: 0
Max Targets: 1 Person

The crystallisation of the legend where Caster tricked the Death God that came to collect his soul. When attempting to save the life of another who had been claimed by a shinigami by offering his own but ended up sacrificing the soul of a third party instead.
Sublimating this feat into a Noble Phantasm, it is conceptualising it into the form of "Redirecting an attack toward another". Although it can only be used once, it is a powerful counter to any attack. For example, when attacked by a Noble Phantasm such as Excalibur, the beam of light generated would curve in the air to strike down an unfortunate target nearby - whether it be a person, a building etc. When attacked by an attack such as the Gae Bolg or Fragrach which overwrite reality, the clashing concepts create an unpredictable result.

Abe no Seimei also supposedly possesses a Third Noble Phantasm but has sealed it away due to not being summoned in the Grand Caster vessel, as he would not possess the power to control it. Apparently it is an Anti-World NP capable of moving planets. There's no way this can be true, right?

Lore

A figure in both history and Japanese mythological lore.

Birthed from the union of a human male and female Kitsune, the child Abe no Seimei was born with exceptional power, able to command Oni despite being a child. Growing up, he quickly mastered his talents and worked as a Onmyōji in the Heian governement. Here he functioned as an astrologer and diviner and often duelled with his rival Ashiya Doman for the position. Well, duelled is a strong word and gives too much credit to the so-called rival of Caster.

Personality

Despite his position as a mentor and aide, he is a trickster through and through. He can easily pinpoint a person's insecurities and flaws and mock them for it whilst being blind to his own. He also has something of a superiority complex and assuming himself to be more powerful/correct although his experience allows for it, it doesn't stop him being insufferable. He is incredibly arrogant, and will become very insulted if someone doesn't recognise him on sight.

Although he believes he is "Destined to save the world", he really doesn't seem to care about anything much at all beside his own childish sense of humour and testing his luck in love. Even though he is chosen by fate and heaven, he doesn't have a plan for the future - being able to know what happens means he usually doesn't bother doing preparation until the last second so he can put off responsibility till the last second much like a university student with a dozen different deadlines.

He guesses his wish is so save humanity as it's apparently his job but he has no idea how one would actually go about doing it.

"My old outfit? That stingy old thing. Get with the times, this looks much better. Cleopatra gets it."

Tactics

A servant only to his whim, he will always go for the best action for him - which may not necessarily be the best one for his master. One will always need several back up plans in case of him betraying you, or him simply not helping you when you need it. In combat however he is immensely powerful and able to combat even the Knight Class servants with minimal trouble, even in close quarters.

"Yeah, I can actually use a sword pretty darn well. Wait, what do you mean the legends never mentioned that?"

Key Words/Crafts Essences

Onmyōdō
A traditional Japanese esoteric cosmology, a mixture of natural science and occultism. It is based on the Chinese philosophies of Wu Xing (five elements) and yin and yang, introduced into Japan at the beginning of the 6th century. It was accepted as a practical system of divination. These practices were influenced further by Taoism, Buddhism and Shintoism, and evolved into the system of onmyōdō around the late 7th century. Onmyōdō was under the control of the imperial government, and later its courtiers, the Tsuchimikado family until the middle of the 19th century, at which point it became prohibited as superstition.

The school of magecraft was founded by Caster himself and remains it's greatest practitioner.

Shikigami - The Twelve Guardian Generals.

"They aren't actually gods. Just really really powerful familiars. Kinda like Guardian Spirits of Humanity.
So yeah, basically like Solomon's evil sticks of doom but more... angel-y.

I wonder if you put them all together under a trenchcoat, they'd act like Goetia?"

Kitsune
"My mother was a fox spirit.
Cute ears, fluffy tails. What wasn't there to like?
Every single one is adorable, well… except for one.
That self-entitled clingy freak can get crushed under a boulder for all I care.
I may even push it on her myself....

Oh, my ears everything else master?
I'm not a fox spirit. I just think they're cute.
Also the nine fluffy tails double as a great pillow."

[RoydGolden]

Seimei: I can see you took a couple cues from my own sheet for this guy, though with enough variation to stand on its own. I see you emphasized the 'five Elements' aspect for the Star Of Seimei where I went with it as a passive amplifier for his own Magecraft. The second NP is wholly original and based off an anecdote I never even came across while researching for own Seimei sheet, so nice job on that.

Is there any particular reason he's lacking Item Construction? If it's overwritten by his summoning Skill like with Solomon or Gilles you should probably at least include a note of such somewhere. And lastly, I got a kick out of the reference you included to my own (obscenely overpowered) planet manipulation NP I gave Seimei, though you repeated the sentence twice so might want to go back and trim that down.

I also see you went with a more sympathetic personality for him, sharing the trait of an appointed "savior of the world" but while my Seimei was a terrifying fanatic yours sounds pretty chill and laid-back most of the time.

[Bird of Hermes]

Seimei: I can see you took a couple cues from my own sheet for this guy, though with enough variation to stand on its own. I see you emphasized the 'five Elements' aspect for the Star Of Seimei where I went with it as a passive amplifier for his own Magecraft. The second NP is wholly original and based off an anecdote I never even came across while researching for own Seimei sheet, so nice job on that.

I got the idea from rereading the Fragments translation recently.

Is there any particular reason he's lacking Item Construction? If it's overwritten by his summoning Skill like with Solomon or Gilles you should probably at least include a note of such somewhere. And lastly, I got a kick out of the reference you included to my own (obscenely overpowered) planet manipulation NP I gave Seimei, though you repeated the sentence twice so might want to go back and trim that down.

His summoning ability through Onmyōdō is why, I should probably impliment it anyways and give it a - mark anyways.

That Planet Manipulation NP was pretty infamous when you first released it so I wanted to reference it in some form, thought the repetition seems to have been a computer error (they have not been my friend today). I'll go and fix it now anyways.

I also see you went with a more sympathetic personality for him, sharing the trait of an appointed "savior of the world" but while my Seimei was a terrifying fanatic yours sounds pretty chill and laid-back most of the time.

I was getting Merlin vibes from this guy's legend so I built his personality to mirror him, though a bit more mean spirited clearly.

- - - Updated - - -

Which i've now done anyways

[Historia]

thanks

your welcome

[SleepMode]

(This was really difficult to keep this from becoming a Jeanne Alter copy…)

(Honestly I'm rather unsure about the Bond Lines part.)

“…A faithful knight? Forgive me, but you’ve mistaken; why would a faithful knight be consumed by hatred? That would be rather…unbecoming of them, hmm?”

Faceclaim

Original Appearance(Credits to Mathia Arkoniel)

Link: https://www.artstation.com/artwork/Lx9AR

Servant Class: Avenger

True Name: Jacques de Molay, Fallen Grandmaster

Place of Origin: France

Alignment: Chaotic Evil(?)

Attribute: Man

Alternate Class: Saber, Caster

Catalyst: His ashes

Likes: Independence, Camaraderie, Responsible people

Dislikes: Breaking promises, Monarchs

Talents: Taking advantage of legal loopholes, Vigilante justice

Natural Enemy: Phillip IV, Pope Clement V, Hugues de Payens?

Parameters:

Strength - B
Endurance - C
Agility - B
Mana - C
Luck - E
N.
Phantasm - A

Background

Jacques de Molay was the 23^rd and last Grandmaster of the Knights Templar. Born in 1244, Jacques was born in a minor nobility; as tradition of nobility during that time, the young man was trained in the ways of knighthood as soon as he was able to walk. Even though the training was grueling, Jacques was confident that he’ll be the valiant defender the Templars were known for. At the age of 21, he was fully knighted and was ordinated into the Order of the Knights Templar. And for the next 20 years, he will rise up in the ranks and join in the effort to claim the Holy Land for God and the Christians.

However, after the decisive defeat at Acre and the death of the 22^nd Grandmaster, Jacques was elected the 23^rd Grandmaster without any contest involved. Determined to get the order back on its feet, Jacques build relations with various powers in the European continent; figures such as Edward I of England from Britain and James I of Aragon from Spain. The Grandmaster even cooperated with the Mongols to gather enough strength to defeat the Mamluks. Jacques also requested a merging of the Knights Hospetaller and Knights Templar as a way to increase their effectiveness.

However, the attempts of reform are met with mostly negative results. While Jacques did earn the favor of the European rulers, they’re reluctant to support another crusade. The merging of military forces were also rejected, for they see no benefits for them. To make matters worse, the Papacy begins to pressure the Order to either be ruled under a king’s authority or be disbanded. Adding more upon the many troubles Jacques faced, the Mongols failed to support them at the most crucial moments against the Malmuks, resulting in loss of the island of Ruad.

In 1305, Jacques was told by Pope Clement V to the Papal offices to discuss about the merger of the Knights Templar with a existing military force. Instead, he was falsely accused of blasphemous rituals for the Templar initiation, the apparent worship of an idol and many others. Without trial, Jacques was thrown into prison, and endured 6 years of torture and interrogations just to get a “proper confession.” During the imprisonment, Pope Clement V dissolved the Knights Templar, and the remaining knights fled to the corners of Europe, avoiding persecution. When the former Grandmaster suspended the trial for 6 years, he was sent straight to be burnt at the stakes under the charge of heresy.

In 1314, Jacques was burnt at the stake along with his high-ranking confidents. Afterwards, a hunt for Templars began, where former members or suspects were hunted down and killed. With the death of Jacques, the Order of the Knights Templar had finally fallen.

Personal Traits

Unlike the other Avengers, Jacques is rather soft-spoken; polite, honest and reserved, and likes to strike up conversations with others. With such mellow behavior, it seemed unlikely that the Servant harbors any sort of resentment at all. Jacques prefers deep discussions, he sometimes has the tendency to suddenly drift into a different tangent, often leaving others caught unaware. In addition, Jacques tends to get rather passionate about certain subjects causing him to ramble on and on.

Due to being summoned as Avenger, Jacques' selflessness and righteousness was combined with his animosity towards his betrayers to form a considerably twisted sense of justice. In turn, this idea of justice causes him to perceive the betrayals of others to be indistinguishable to his very own. Believing traitors to be lowest of scums, he will kill them all for the harm caused to the people they backstabbed. To Jacques, this is his vengeance. There is no "friend or foe" to him, but merely between whether or not you're a traitor. This philosophy doubly applies to kings or ruling priests of any kind, for Jacques perceives them to use others as stepping stones for their selfish agendas. While he won't straight up kill them (that's only reserved for Philip IV), it will take a while for him to see past his distorted view.

In a way, Jacques isn't just avenging for himself, but also for the sake of those who suffered at the expense of others.

Oddly, Jacques has a soft spot for victims of betrayal (like Medea or Kiyohime), since he sees them as unfortunate souls who were used by others for selfish motives.

Avenger!Jacque's wish for the Holy Grail is for the erasure of the concept of "lying" from the world. For all betrayals are built on lies, so if there's no way for anyone to lie at all, then there would be no betrayals in the world. And if the concept of betrayal ceases to exist, then his vengeance will finally be over.

Craft Essence/Reactions

Corrupted Cross of Demetrius

"It is said that one who wields this blade must defend others from injustice,
to protect and guard what is holy and sacred.
I gripped this blade all those years ago,
with the promise to bring justice to the Holy Lands.

Now, with my order gone, and my body destroyed,
I cursed those who turned their backs on me.
Even when those dogs had met their end, I still did not rest;
for there are still those who suffer under the manipulations of others.

With my blade in hand, I shall rain death upon them all
to achieve a world without treachery;
for their sake and for mine."

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Reactions to Other Servants:

King Philip IV: ​Simple: upon a mere glance, Jacques will draw his sword and will do all he can to kill the pathetic king in the most excruciating way possible.

Saber!Jacque de Molay: He sees this version of himself as a naive and overly optimistic fool with absolutely no understanding of the crushing sense of failure and betrayal. However, Avenger!Jacques may or may not be jealous of Saber!Jacques for this exact reason.

Hugues de Payens: Prefers to avoid him whenever he can. He doesn't want the Great Grandmaster to see what his legacy had become. Little did Jacques know that the 1st Grandmaster didn't think of him this way at all.

All Avengers (Excluding Shinjuku Avenger): "I just realized something... We're all French. ...Did I say that out loud?"

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Bond Lines:

Lv.1: "Let me be frank, Master; I will be your blade to kill any in your way, but if you... turn your back on anyone, so to speak, I will not hesitate to cut you down from where you stand."

Lv.2: "Calm yourself Master, it's natural for me to be harmed to this degree. After all, this is my role as Avenger; to burn those all in my path, with little regard to my being. Now, I believed that you have more important goals to fulfill..."

Lv.3: "As an Avenger, I am revenge personified. Because of my unjust death, I took on this form to deal justice to those who turned their backs to the companions and allies who needed them most. Why do I do this? Because there are no one else know of their injustices. No, not even God himself bestowed judgement for these wicked beings; not even when I was burnt for false accusations... So if God does not deal out justice, I will take it upon myself to bring them to their knees and bring justice to these scums. Do you understand now, Master? This is my "vengeance," my "divine retribution" for the betrayed... Did I get carried away, Master?"

Lv.4: "...Why do you always look after me, Master? I am a only a Servant, an ephemeral scrap of a whole whose purpose is a weapon for you to wield. And you still realize that I'll kill you should you betray anyone here, or is it that you do not care? ...Nevertheless, this is rather foolish of you to bond with me. (sign) If this is what you want, then so be it."

Lv.5: "Remember what I said a while ago? 'I will be your blade to kill any in your way?' That may have been a threat, but let that phrase be a genuine declaration this time; while my vows as a Templar still holds, I can promise that this specter of vengeance will protect you from all harm ... That was cheesy, wasn't it?"

Skills

Class Skills:

Avenger - B -
One of an Avenger’s Class Skills, where it represents the Avenger’s ability to gather the hatred and grudges of the people onto oneself. Allows wounds and insults directed towards Jacques to be channeled into strength.

Throughout his life, Jacques served both the Cross-and his country with great loyalty. The Templar grandmaster even willingly loaned large amounts of their wealth to Philip IV when the country was in debt.Unfortunately, his charity to the king ended up becoming his downfall. Unwilling to repay the debt, he collaborated with Pope Clement V of the Vatican to steal the order’s riches. They accused Jacques of various offenses, the worst being such as the rejection to the cross and conduction of satanic rituals. After nearly 6 years of interrogation and torture, Jacques and the higher members of the Knights Templar were burnt at the stake in 1314.

At this rank, Jacques will not only seek vengeance in the form of killing the French royalty and Papacy, but also bringing all those who betrayed others to justice, no matter who they are. Additionally, this Skill grants him some sort of sixth-sense allows him to tell whether a person has betrayed someone in their lifetimes or not.

Oblivion Correction - D~B -
The ability to hold onto a grudge, even when all others had forgotten about it. As Avenger, this single-minded determination increases the damage dealt to others from beyond oblivion in battle.

Even when centuries pass, Jacques’ hatred against the French monarchy and the Church still persists to this day. But since both Philip IV and Clement V died later on, the Skill is decreased to the rank of D. Should he encounter those of French royalty, however…

Self-Replenishment (Mana) - C -
An Avenger’s ability to replenish his or her own supply of magical energy, or Mana. The higher the rank, the larger in rate of replenishment.

Until Jacques achieves the vengeance he longed for, Mana will be recovered every round, slowly but surely.

Personal Skills:

Golden Rule - C -
A Skill that measures one’s fortune to acquire wealth.

Since the Middle Ages, the Knights Templar were not only known as holy knights who fought for God, they were also the first bankers who paved the way for modern economics. Also, it was said that they’ve once discovered the temple of Solomon, and collected the vast riches within for themselves. As a result, the Knights Templar was easily one of the wealthiest organizations in the world. However, during Jacques’ time Philip IV squandered a portion of the money when France was in debt. Additionally, the financial costs of the Crusades began to stack up for the Order, also costing another portion of their supply. Because of this, the Skill’s ranking was lower than usual.

Protection of the Faith (False) - A -
A Skill possessed only by those who have lost their faith. It is not a blessing from a higher existence, but only the absoluteness of one's body and soul, which is not born from faith but from personal resolve. And just like its True counterpart, it causes abnormalities in the personality should the ranking be too high.

As the Grandmaster of the Knights Templar, possessing staunch faith in the Lord is necessary for Jacques. As a result, he gave everything to the Order’s service along with recovering the Holy Lands. However, after the loss of the Holy Land the lack of any support, Jacques’s faith began to waver. The point of no return was when Jacques’ was burned at the stake, where his trust to God was burnt away along with his body.
Upon being summoned as Avenger, from where his piety was grew a obsessive drive to bring traitors of all the world to justice.

Remnant of the Fallen Order - A -
A Skill that denotes Jacques’ position as a leader of a failing organization. Even when the Order’s conditions were unfavorable, one must possess the steady resolve to restore the organization to its former glory. A combination of C-ranking Military Tactics, Charisma, Battle Continuation and Innocent Monster.

To the misfortune of Jacques, he was titled Grandmaster when the Knights Templar was at its steady decline. Even with the odds against him, the newly appointed Grandmaster was determined to reform the ailing Order. From building relations with European powers to organizing regiments for retaking the Holy Land, Jacques was a effective leader. Accused for rejecting the cross and partaking in blasphemous rituals, Jacques was unyielding against these rumors. Even before the fire consumed him, the Grandmaster lasted long enough to curse both the king and the pope great suffering for them and their future generations.

Noble Phantasms

Corrupted Cross of Demetrius - Once-Pure Blade of the Holy Order - B+ - Anti-Unit -

The holy sword that was first found by Hugues de Payens within the Temple of Solomon. Said to be blessed by the blood of a warrior-saint from a distant Age, this blade was passed down from Grandmaster to Grandmaster. As each Grandmaster gripped the hilt, the blade always changed forms to ones more suited to its wielder’s fighting style. Additionally, the sword grants protection to magecraft and other “dark arts,” like something akin to Magic Resistance. Appropriate for a holy sword, the Cross of Demetrius deals more damage to beings of demonic or pagan origins; when combatting them, white flames envelop the blade to cleanse its foes of their evil.

At least, those was the blade’s traits before Jacques’ death.
In Avenger!Jacques’ hands, the once-holy blade is a completely different sword. Twisted to a hunk of steel that barely resembled a sword, most of its functions are inversions of the holy counterpart. Post-corruption, this blade’s ability to repel magecraft has greatly improved ; allowing the blade to resist High-Thaumaturgy or Greater Rituals akin to A-rank Magic Resistance. As a symbol of justice tainted by vengeance, dark mists constantly envelopes the blade, which decreases all parameters by one rank to opponents who betrayed/slandered another in their lives. Because of its corrupted state, the sword will deal bonus damage to humans or believers of the Lord.

However, because of the blade’s corrupted nature, this makes Jacques even more susceptible to the Sacraments of the Church. Additionally, if the opponent doesn’t possess any human traits nor worships the Lord, then the Corrupted Cross would just be a really heavy blade without any bonuses.

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Malédiction de Mon Nom - Retribution to Those Who Wronged Me - A++ - Anti-Unit(Post-Mortem)/Support -

Jacques’ infamous last moments and subsequent events crystalized as one Noble Phantasm. When the Templar Grandmaster was burned at the stake along with his fellow knights, he cursed both Philip IV and Pope Clement V that they will face their deaths, along with great misfortune to their future generations. The curse came to fruition years later, where Pope Clement died of illness while Philip IV died of a sudden stroke while hunting. Eventually, even the late king’s family line fell from grace and faded nto obscurity.

Serving as a “Dying Curse,” this NP activates only upon the death of Jacques. Instead of dissolving into light, his body will be engulfed in black flames and said flames will release a wave of unknown energy that travels up to 20 meters radius before dispersing. Those caught in the wave will suffer through different effects depending on who they are. If they’re Servants, their consumption of mana will increase twofold along with their Luck parameter dropping by three ranks. If a Master is caught in the wave, it will result in them catching a random disease along with the inability to perform magecraft (such as the use of Runes and Formalcraft) as long as the sickness persists.

Additionally, if the Servant responsible for Jacques' defeat was a sovereign in their lives, they will receive a special package of lowering their Luck straight to E, along with a chance of death via a “stroke” should they engage in combat in later time. However, the effects of the NP will only work on the Master and Servant responsible for his defeat, so anyone else caught in the wave will be unharmed. Additionally, the curse can be outright avoided should the Servant possess Magic Resistance of A+ or Luck parameter of A. However, Servants who were monarchs will be cursed, no matter how high their Luck parameter.

Oddly, this NP gives a blessing of sorts to Servants/Masters who were betrayed in their lives.(Note that it has to be a Servant/Master pair who didn’t kill Jacques.) The blessing includes all parameters going up by one rank for Servants, while Masters gets the quality of their Magic Circuits improved. Perhaps even as a Avenger, Jacques’ still have a soft spot for those who suffered betrayal.

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How does one Edge

[4score7years]

Briefly: I like the personality and that "Remnant of the Fallen Order" skill. The First FC doesn't show up for me. The First NP seems a little simple to me, but you gotta work with what is available, I suppose. The second one is a little more creative, though I think its exact effects could probably be fine-tuned to some extent. A+ or A++ for the Magic Resistance instead of EX, for starters. Also, how does a Master being unable to use Magecraft work? Is their Servant affected in some way, or does it just prevent stuff like Runes, Formalcraft, and so on?

[SleepMode]

Fixed the Image.

Regarding the NP, what I meant was that the Masters are unable to use Formalcraft and such.

[venomking]

True name: Michael the ark angel.
class: savior.
alternative classes: saber.
likes: humans, good nature, a good battle, and honor.
dislikes: lucifer, murder, etc.
alignment: lawful good.

Stats:
strength:
A++
agility:
A
endurance:
B
mana:
EX
luck:
B

background: he is the most powerful of the archangels, when he was first created by God he was gifted teh geratest of physical and magical abilities, and after obeying and carrying goods orders for 1000's of years, he wa sgjven the job to guard the root, as the root was not only the entrance to other realities, but it was also the entrance to heaven, and when mages reach the root they are not leaving simply becuas ether trapped there, but becuase they are prombly killed Michael.

Personality: strict to a fault, heroic in every way, and sees the grail as a passageway to eth root so it must be destroyed.

Personal skills:
divinity, A++
as this rank the only thing more divine them him would likely be Jesus or God.

angel core, A
its simler to how saber posses a Mage core instead of Mage circuits, however are far more powerful
if sabers are a factory for magic energy, Michaels core is a freaking coll fusion of magick, creating magic to no end, leading to EX ranking in magic.

Magic reasistence: EX
at thsi rank it would take magic attacks of EX or higher a re neck cry to damage him.

Unwavering Bravery: A++
at thsi rank, he will never feel fear, and cannot be countrolled by typical methods of mind countroll.

NP:
excalabur, sword of promised of victory: EX, anti personal.
useing his rank mana he came salty dispatch A ranked mana strainers sue ing teh same abilty saber sues in her primary excalabur atatck, as well as one of the same rank if he decided to get serious. But by powering enouogh wer even he will be left tired he can unlock it true nature, as teh sword of promised victory. It's true abilty is beyond human comprehension but the basic theory is changes the very laws of realitys, space, and time, fate, cuase and effect. It does does not nearly destroy or alter reality but rewrites it interna, makeing it absultky imposibble to bloc, doge, whatever. Once it's true nature is activated it is not qeastion of weather you will die, you WILL die.

wings if the archangel, A++
Allows to travel anywhere, he could little travel to other realities, teh root itself, and even the throne of heroes.

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He might be a little OP, but I figured he'd the most powerful of angels so he needed to be OP.

[RoydGolden]

De Molay: Another really good sheet from you, Zh! Long-time visitors here may remember I contemplated doing a sheet for the guy myself, but your take is far more interesting then anything I would've come up with. The composite Skill to represent his membership in the Templars works nicely (one of the ideas I had for my own discarded sheet, in fact).

His NPs are also quite cool. The first one is simple but fitting, and I appreciate you managed to find a mythical sword to give him (part of the reason my Molay sheet fell through is because though I envisioned him as a Saber, I had absolutely no ideas for any kind of suitably unique sword even remotely associated with his legend). The second one is quite flavorful and well thought-out too. Quite edgy, but Avengers are pretty much the epitome of edge by definition and if anything yours was quite a bit toned down in that regard then some of my mine (the world's first yandere vampire onee-chan and a sociopathic trickster god who wants to destroy the world for funsies).

Lastly though, I have to confess the first image still doesn't work for me. The second though, is wonderfully cool and evocative. Makes me wonder where you found it, since it's certainly not the usual animu fluff.

[SleepMode]

Fixed the Image problem.

(Is the Faceclaim edgy enough?)

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[RoydGolden]

Michael: ...Why does he have Excalibur? There's no direct connections between the two legends and while you could probably justify it if you really wanted (Excalibur being canonically the greatest holy swords and a Divine Construct, one could imagine it ending up in the hands of God's greatest holy warrior), I really don't see why you wouldn't just give him a unique sword. At least add something on to the name and have it be a "sister sword" like Galatine rather then simply ripping off Arturia's thunder...

Onto his Skills... while there's similar dubious precedent in canon (such as St. George), giving Divinity to entities from Christian mythology is kind of an odd choice when one of the religion's literal founding points is that "there is no god but Yahweh". I'd suggest scrapping it and instead making Angel Core a composite that gives him the benefits of Divinity and other such Skills (essentially Goddess Divine Core, Christian ver.).

Does Wings Of An Archangel take the form of literal wings or is it just a metaphor? Because it couldn't hurt to describe them if the former... (And in any case, this seems like the kind of ability that should really be severely limited or even sealed altogether when summoned as a Servant, especially since travelling to the Root immediately voids the entire original purpose behind the Grail War)

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Oh yeah Dat's some edgy shit right there. Definitely fitting an Avenger though...

I forgot to ask, but since De Molay was involved with the crusades, how do you think he'd get along with my Nameless Crusader Servant?

[4score7years]

Fixed the Image problem.

(Is the Faceclaim edgy enough?)

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Alright. Both of those FCs are very nice, actually, the first suitably edgy and the second distinct in its own way. In general, I'd say this was a pretty good sheet from you, so congrats.

and yeah, crediting the artist where possible is always a good idea.

[SleepMode]

Oh yeah Dat's some edgy shit right there. Definitely fitting an Avenger though...

I forgot to ask, but since De Molay was involved with the crusades, how do you think he'd get along with my Nameless Crusader Servant?

F/GO: To say that Jacques encountering the amalgamation of all the crusaders who died for a eventually hopeless cause is heartrending is an massive understatement.

You may see the Grandmaster trying to avoid her. And maybe not-so-discreetly tries to leave the premise when she's around.

But when confronted, it's revealed that even though it's been centuries, seeing the Servant reminded him of a fellow crusader that he promised that she will live through the Siege of Raud. Unfortunately, she died when the Templars attempted to retreat. So not only is the Servant the representation of his failure as a Grandmaster, but also the one promise he was unable to fulfill as one too.

In a Grail War, it hits even harder, for Jacques is likely an "Replacement Avenger" sent by Angra Mainyu. When the Grandmaster sees one of his supposed "obstacles" to be the representation of his failure, you swear you can see tears in his eyes.

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[venomking]

No, there wings. Also he's the guardian of the root, so obviously he has to have a way to travel there. And if a human were there he'd have to kill them. He's the grail as way of bypassing him so ist entire point for being in such a war is to destroy the grail. Read, my background. It's like EA in which he just wouldn't use it. Also if you didn't know it's fairly popular idea that Excalibur was originally Michaels sword and King aurther was just using it.

[RoydGolden]

Also if you didn't know it's fairly popular idea that Excalibur was originally Michaels sword and King aurther was just using it.

Really? I admit to never having heard of that before. Also, the NP's description itself is positively riddled with typos even by your standards, so I'd definitely suggest going over it again.

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F/GO: To say that Jacques encountering the amalgamation of all the crusaders who died for a eventually hopeless cause is heartrending is an massive understatement.

You may see the Grandmaster trying to avoid her. And maybe not-so-discreetly tries to leave the premise when she's around.

But when confronted, it's revealed that even though it's been centuries, seeing the Servant reminded him of a fellow crusader that he promised that she will live through the Siege of Raud. Unfortunately, she died when the Templars attempted to retreat. So not only is the Servant the representation of his failure as a Grandmaster, but also the one promise he was unable to fulfill as one too.

In a Grail War, it hits even harder, for Jacques is likely an "Replacement Avenger" sent by Angra Mainyu. When the Grandmaster sees one of his supposed "obstacles" to be the representation of his failure, you swear you can see tears in his eyes.

...Wow, that scenario you put out is scarily plausible and also one hell of a tearjerker. Now you've made me actually want to read a fanfic of some kind that features the two...

It's even more tragic since Molay sounds like he can easily end up a "final boss" sort of character (incidentally, his wish for a "world without lies" reminds me a bit of Ragnarok Connection from Code Geass) and the Nameless Crusader is very much a "protagonist" type, so the odds are quite high they'll end up fighting against each other for the Grail War's final duel. (Loaded with drama and pathos, I'm sure)

I could imagine NC managing to manifest her Jerusalem Reality Marble, and Molay bursting into tears at the sight of the splendid holy city that so many crusaders fought for. He then realizes what a monster he's become and concedes that the Nameless Crusader's path is true, but resolves to fight her with the last of his strength anyway as one last honor. (Sort of a Gudako versus Human King Goetia sort of deal)

Cue an epic fight that culminates with Molay being blasted by Saint Powah!!! Then as he fades into light, Molay gives one last bitter smile and salutes the resolve of a certain nameless crusader... Sound any good?

[Arashi_Leonhart]

Really? I admit to never having heard of that before.

That's cause it's not. Some of the anticedent swords that may have inspired it were, but Excalibur itself is very celtic.

And regardless, in the Nasuverse its from welsh faeries forged by the planet, so, yeah.