Create-A-Servant 2

**Dragolord09** · April 18th, 2019, 06:11 PM

Thanks Sunny! It was well worth waiting for this sheet.

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Lambda-Nu: Admittedly I thought those two ideas would spark the interest of the Chinese sheet experts like Shiki-pon, SleepMode, or Daneel Rush, but they're available for anybody to grab up and fill out.

**SleepMode** · April 18th, 2019, 08:21 PM

Eyyyy

It was nice to see its final form

**Cataquack Warrior** · April 19th, 2019, 12:47 PM

Kaguya-hime sure looks interesting; it did a great job at giving her a unique flair fitting with the Type Moon setting. Now I'm sort of curious to see what her corrupted Alter Ego Servants would be like...

Icarus is also pretty neat; I hadn't imagined he would be a candidate for the Beast class, but it makes a lot of sense after reading the entry. I do kind of wish that there had been a specific bio section for his story, but I managed to get a fair understanding of things by reading the various pieces of lore scattered throughout the entry.

On another note, I'd like to submit an Alice in Wonderland-inspired Servant. Please let me know how things look, or it's the death penalty!

Queen of Hearts ~ Red-White Queen of the Looking-Glass

"Like blood flows through the heart, all ways belong to me, so you'd better do as I say ~ or off with your head!"

Class: Caster

True Name:

Red Girl in the Mirror

Appearance: A mature but still youthful lady dressed in royal attire of old, fancifully decorated with various card symbols (especially hearts) and splotted with blood here and there. She also sometimes dresses like a chess piece, entirely in either red (to blend in with the blood) or white (to make the blood stand out better). Once in a while, usually when she loses her temper or is particularly gloomy, she turns from an adult to a petite little girl. Regardless of form or attire, she has bright-red hair like blood, and her eyes always brim with madness, destruction, and loneliness.

Alignment: Chaotic Evil

Master: Illyasviel von Einzbern

Like: Hearts, Executions, Games, Tarts, Nonsense, Being Right

Dislike: Not Getting Her Way, Wasting Time, Losing, Boring Things

Lore:

Tale of a Bloody Mirror and Her Wonderland

We begin our tale in the reign of Queen Mary I of England. Ascending to monarch of a nation that had recently turned Protestant, the devoutly Catholic queen faced much pressure from all sides, made all the worse because she had yet to produce an heir. Then, one day, the queen began to show signs of pregnancy, and there was much rejoicing as she prepared to welcome her precious Anne into the world. But some embittered mages, seeking to humiliate the queen's triumph, cast a forbidden ritual on the queen. They stole away the baby - and a fraction of Mary's own soul due to it still being in the womb - and trapped it in a mirror. The gossip that she faked the entire pregnancy, combined with how she would occasionally catch glimpse of a girl who looked like her lost daughter in the mirror, drove the queen to madness. But the mages responsible had little time to rejoice, for in her rage she unleashed a wave of persecutions against the Protestants she blamed for all her woes - with the conspirators being one of the many sent to the execution block.

Eventually, the queen died, and the bloody massacres ended. But the girl in the mirror, who knew of nothing but blood and sorrow, endured in her prison, looking out from mirrors at a world she could never reach. Many would summon Bloody Mary by purpose or accident, and while on occasion she would grace them with their fortunes, most often she would lash out at them in pain and sorrow. She eventually discovered that, having been taken to the mirror while she was still forming in the womb, she was a being of pure blood, and could manipulate it as a her right. She would trap victims in illusions and, following the example of her mother, rule and break them as a proud, vicious, childish, and lonely queen.

Then, one day, Bloody Mary laid her eyes upon a girl of pure innocence and imagination - a girl who looked almost exactly like her own image. Not wishing to let this chance escape from her, Mary Ann invited the girl into the mirror, planning to switch places and escape her miserable existence as nothing but a cursed reflection. But something unexpected happened: that little girl, so kind and filled with wonder, befriended the queen, and shared with her fanciful ideas for a world of fantasy and fun. Was the Alice who left the mirror truly her, or did the Queen of Hearts carry through with her plan in the end? Only the bloody girl-queen in the mirror knows the truth, but ever since, something changed in the mirror, which was no longer a void of blood and darkness but rather a vivid wonderland of its own.

Personality:

Mad Child-Queen of Nonsense

The Queen of Hearts is a capricious and violent tyrant who insists that all ways belong to her and chops off the head of anyone in her way. Her moods are whimsical and prone to change at a moment's notice; often she will make a random decree and threaten bloodshed if it's not fulfilled in half a moment's second, only to later rescind it and demand the heads of those who "disobeyed" her. She can be very elegant, regal, and polite like a queen one moment, and the next she'll be throwing a childish tantrum at some perceived slight.

If anything, her chaotic frenzies are only heightened by her stubborn rejection of anything considered "sensible", "real", sane", or, as she'd call them, 'boring". It almost seems as if she purposefully finds a way to twist around logic into impossible knots. Another name for her could be "Mary Quite Contrary" in how she insists on refuting anything she's told, even things she favored just a minute before. The only way you can get her to agree with you is if your argument is nonsensical to begin with, for such things delight her. A lonely girl of nothingness who views reality as sour grapes she can only gaze at from beyond the looking-glass...

Perhaps influenced by her mother's example, Bloody Mary believes that the right way of a queen is to always be right and punish anyone who says otherwise. And she thinks the best punishments are the bloodiest ones. She often throws kangaroo-court trials of supposed offenders, and sometimes it seems like she'll make up crimes if she doesn't have any at hand, just so she can impose her order on others. In some way, to her all other people are not living things but simply items: playthings to toy with, tools to use, victims to break. She gives the most respect for people who embody her ideal of a "righteous ruler", but she also has a soft spot for children and will spoil them silly.

She often demands that her "subjects" play in games that she seemingly makes up on the spot - and changes on the spot, too. The only real rule seems to be that she always wins, and certainly does not lose - not out of any sense of competitiveness, but rather just believing it right for the queen to win and never lose.

Strangely, for all her harshness and hot-temperedness, the Bloody Queen never seems to show genuine hate toward others. It may be more that she does not truly understand the concept of pain or death, since such things are outlawed by her own edict in her Wonderland. And however much she throws a fit when people argue with her, she seems to dislike passivity more, pouting when people just cave in and agree with her from the start. In fact, much of her madness seems almost like a girl playing pretend in her mother's clothes, or throwing tantrums so the attention goes to her. The truth of the matter, as exemplified by her true form, is that the queen is nothing but a child, who never had the chance to grow up or even live.

Bond Lines

Relationships

Craft Essence

Stats/Parameters:

Strength: D

Agility: D

Endurance: B

Mana: A

Luck: E

Noble Phantasm: B

Skills

Noble Phantasms

Armaments

**Shiki-pon** · April 19th, 2019, 03:52 PM

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Alternate Classes: N/A
True Name: Publius Vergilius Maro
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
Origin: Rome (1st century BCE)
Armament: N/A

Parameters:
STR: E
END: E
AGI: B
MANA: A
LUCK: B
NP: B+

Skills

Class Skills

Territory Creation - Rank B: A Caster-class Skill. It is the Skill to build a special terrain that is advantageous to oneself as a magus, such as for the purpose of collecting mana.
Creation of a ‘Workshop’ becomes possible. As Caster was trained as a magus once, the principles of creating a Workshop are familiar to him. Oddly enough, placing his workshop in a graveyard or mausoleum vastly increases the terrain’s benefits for Caster.

Item Construction - Rank B: A Caster-class Skill. It is the Skill to manufacture magical items, from implements of war to items for daily use. Also, this Skill requires time to gather components and manufacture items.
Caster can create a multitude of magical objects, ranging from constructs to amulets.

Personal Skills

Divination - Rank A: The ability to foretell the events of the future through interpreting signs. Divination allows for the viewing of future events, but the accuracy and reliability of the user’s interpretations is dependent on the rank of this Skill. At A rank, it is possible to accurately see events occurring centuries from now, as well as to understand what led to these events and their repercussions in the future.
As Divination can be seen as a systematic method with which to organize what appear to be disjointed, random facets of existence such that they provide insight into a problem at hand, Caster was naturally drawn to the practice. It is said that in his works he predicted the rise of Christianity and many other major events, to the point that his works were used as a medium for divination in another era.

Weak Constitution - Rank C: A weakness struck by the nature of frail health. Similar in nature to Innocent Monster, where the perception of the people in the future affects the existence of the Heroic Spirit.
Caster is accompanied by the risk of a sudden status drop at anytime of every action. The probability of risk is not high, but when it is invoked in combat, it is immense. Throughout his life, Caster was plagued by poor health, often becoming bedridden for weeks.

Perfectionism - Rank A: A Skill representing one’s unfailing perfectionism in all things. Related to Mental Pollution, Perfectionism provides slight resistance to mental interference, though the possibility of mutual understanding is largely unaffected. With the user’s every action, a Luck check is performed. On a success, the action succeeds perfectly, granting a plus modifier to the action. On a failure, the effectiveness of the action is halved.
Caster was famous for his striving for perfection. It is even said that he attempted to destroy his life’s work, the epic Aeneid, for errors and imperfections perceptible only to himself.

Noble Phantasms

Lineage of the Magii

Magius Vergilius

Magecraft, Rank A+

Though possessing the lineage and talents necessary for a magus, Caster largely neglected such arts to focus on the art of poetry. However, the exploits told of him in later times have manifested as a Noble Phantasm.
Rather than the simple divination Magecraft that he used in life, Magius Vergilius allows him to utilize the myriad abilities attributed to him in legend, including shapeshifting, giving life to inanimate objects, fully controlling the forces of nature, necromancy and the summoning of spirits among others.
However, as Magius Vergilius is a Noble Phantasm rather than an ability he possesses, it must be activated through a specific ritual for Caster to use his expanded magecraft.

Protective Skeletal Charm

Ossium Vergilii

Anti-Unit~Anti-City, Rank A

Caster’s second Noble Phantasm, and one that only manifests after Caster’s demise. According to legend, a city had collected his bones and fashioned them into a protective amulet against invaders. Once Caster dies, his fading spiritual body reveals a baroque amulet forged of bone. Ossium Vergilii is one of the rare Noble Phantasms that can be passed on to others, allowing anyone to benefit from its protective powers.
Once claimed, Ossium Vergilii sets its protection on an area as designated by its user. This ‘area’ can be a location as large as a city, a group of people or simply the user’s own body. Ossium Vergilii projects a field capable of stopping up to B-rank attacks. In addition to this, any attack towards targets under Ossium Vergilii’s protection will receive an immediate counterattack, equaling the intended attack in strength, though limited to an A-rank attack. The counterattack mostly takes the form of the attack itself turning on the attacker, or in cases where this is impossible, a freak force of nature inflicting the damage itself. Sudden storms, collapsing buildings and the like can be counted amongst the possible ways of manifestation. Though normally these kinds of things would be unable to injure a Servant, Ossium Vergilii counts these implements as part of the Noble Phantasm itself, allowing them to freely damage Heroic Spirits.

Description

Lore

Virgil was an ancient Roman poet of the Augustan period. He wrote three of the most famous poems in Latin literature: the Eclogues, the Georgics, and the epic Aeneid. A number of minor poems, collected in the Appendix Vergiliana, are sometimes attributed to him. He traditionally ranked as one of Rome's greatest poets.
Virgil’s area of birth is shrouded in mystery, though it is known that he was descended from the gens Vergilia and Magia. With his father marrying into a clan of economic means, Virgil received his education at Cremona in Milan and Rome where he studied Greek and Roman authors and poets. The Magia family also insisted that Virgil train in the art of Magecraft, but he eschewed these pursuits in favor of poetry.
Sometime after the publication of his first works, Virgil became part of the circle of Maecenas, Octavian's capable agent d'affaires who sought to counter sympathy for Antony among the leading families by rallying Roman literary figures to Octavian's side. Virgil came to know many of the other leading literary figures of the time, including Horace, in whose poetry he is often mentioned, and Varius Rufus, who later helped finish the Aeneid.
At Maecenas' insistence Virgil spent the ensuing years on the long didactic hexameter poem called the Georgics which he dedicated to Maecenas. The ostensible theme of the Georgics is instruction in the methods of running a farm.
Virgil’s last and most notable work was the epic poem the Aeneid, where he strove to exemplify Rome’s divine destiny. In 19 BCE. Virgil traveled to Greece where he planned on spending the next three years completing the Aeneid. During his journey he became ill with fever and returned to Italy, where he died on September 21, 19 BCE soon after arriving at Brundisium. On his deathbed Virgil requested the destruction of the Aeneid, believing the work to be imperfect or no longer backing its general message, but Augustus is said to have intervened and mandated its publication.

Virgil's reputation was such that it inspired legends associating him with magic and prophecy. From at least the 3rd century, Christian thinkers interpreted Eclogues 4, which describes the birth of a boy ushering in a golden age, as a prediction of Jesus' birth. From this was born a body of works by itself, focusing on Virgil’s magical prowess and his adventures.

Notes

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Alternate Classes: N/A
True Name: Gaius Cilnius Maecenas
Alignment: Lawful Good
Origin: Rome (1st century BCE)
Armament: N/A

Parameters:
STR: E
END: D
AGI: D
MANA: D++
LUCK: A
NP: C+

Skills

Noble Phantasms

Description

Likes: Clarity, talented people
Dislikes: His own performance, politics
Talents: Art critique, fostering development, politics
Natural Enemy: Octavia

Caster’s true identity is Gaius Cilnius Maecenas, also known simply as Maecenas, the Patron of Artists.

Maecenas is a carefree person used to luxury, and has an approachable air about him. He laments the loss of his Golden Rule, forcing him to live in a lesser state than he feels he should. Maecenas expects to be entertained in recompense for his services, but he earnestly enjoys almost any performance, and even gives heartfelt commentary on possible development.
He is supremely adept in the art of politics, though he himself does not consider the field an art. As such, Maecenas tries to avoid delving into such activity as much as possible, though it is fully possible for him to skillfully craft alliances and deals with other parties without much trouble.
Though Maecenas does not particularly care for the warriors among Heroic Spirits, he absolutely fawns over the artistically inclined. Even if such Servants would be enemies of his, Maecenas will insist on witnessing a performance. He does not carry any grievances toward other Heroic Spirits, nor does he truly care for their conduct, and as such he is welcoming of any attempts to ally with him.
In Maecenas’ eyes, his Master is his sponsor, and he regards himself as a twisted variant of a guest as well. He expects to be fully provided for, but he is understanding, if condescending, even should the accommodations he receives not quite live up to his expectations. If his Master shows talent, he is bound to try and sell the idea of developing them into a Heroic Spirit to them, impatiently overseeing their development into a Heroic Spirit.
Maecenas’s wish seems to be simply to live in his idea of luxury for another lifetime. However, his true desire is to become a capable artist himself, as though he enjoyed art tremendously, he was never able to create anything worthy himself.

Lore

Gaius Cilnius Maecenas was an ally, friend and political advisor to Octavian (who was to become the first Emperor of Rome as Caesar Augustus) as well as an important patron for the new generation of Augustan poets, including both Horace and Virgil.
Maecenas first appears in history books in 40 BCE, when he was employed by Octavian in arranging his marriage with Scribonia, and afterwards in assisting to negotiate the Treaty of Brundisium and the reconciliation with Mark Antony. As a close friend and advisor he had even acted as deputy for Augustus when he was abroad.
It was in 38 BC that Horace was introduced to Maecenas, who had before this received Lucius Varius Rufus and Virgil into his intimacy. In the "Journey to Brundisium," in 37, Maecenas and Marcus Cocceius Nerva – great-grandfather of the future emperor Nerva – are described as having been sent on an important mission, and they were successful in patching up, by the Treaty of Tarentum, a reconciliation between the two claimants for supreme power.
During the Sicilian war against Sextus Pompeius in 36, Maecenas was sent back to Rome, and was entrusted with supreme administrative control in the city and in Italy. He was vicegerent of Octavian during the campaign that led to the Battle of Actium, when, with great promptness and secrecy, he crushed the conspiracy of Lepidus the Younger; during the subsequent absences of his chief in the provinces he again held the same position.
In his spare time, he avoided the affairs of politics like plague and headed an exclusive circle of young artists, whom he entertained at his estate. Maecenas’ support of poetry is such that his name has become a byword for patrons of the arts.
During the latter years of his life he fell somewhat out of favour with his master. Suetonius attributes the loss of the imperial favour to Maecenas having indiscreetly revealed to Terentia, his beautiful but difficult wife, the discovery of the conspiracy in which her brother Lucius Licinius Varro Murena was implicated, but according to Cassius Dio (writing in the early 3rd century AD) it was due to the emperor's relations with Terentia. Maecenas died in 8 BC, leaving the emperor sole heir to his wealth.

Decided to make the rest of the group I had started with Ovid and Horace, adding Maecenas to the fold as their sponsor. I hope I did them justice.
Guess Dragolord was right and I couldn't resist the temptation here.

**cooldownnow** · April 19th, 2019, 06:21 PM

Have to say Maecenas might be one of the coolest servants I've read. I really like the way his Noble Phantasm works.

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Rider of the Oracle
Saving the world? I’d much rather just stay in my fields but if necessary I will shine with the brilliance of the Sun to protect it.

Class: Rider
Other Classes: Archer
True Name: Admetus/Apollo
Alignment: Lawful Good
Place of Origin: Greece

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Parameters:

STR: A
END: B+
AGI: A
MGI: B
LCK: A
NP: A++-EX

Likes: Farming, Alcestis, Music, Artemis
Dislikes: Artemis, Snakes
Talent: Herding, Archery, Music
Natural Enemy: Artemis
Attribute: Earth
Armament: A Bow
Catalyst: Bones of a Sacred Cow

Class Skills:

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Personal Skills:

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Noble Phantasm(s):

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Lore:

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Admetus was the kind king of Pherae known for his justice and hospitality. So well known was he that when Apollo was punished to become a human he chose to live in Pherae and become Admetus’s herdsman. After Apollo regained his divinity he blessed Admetus’s cattle to all bear twins giving the nation prosperity. Even as a god Aollo still found himself close to Admetus and often times assisted him in his endevors. When Admetus was trying to win the hand of the lovely Alcestis he had to prove his worth by yoking a boar and a lion to a chariot and bring it to his future father in law, a nearly impossible task. Apollo saw how distraught his friend was at not being able to marry the woman he loved he completed the task himself and gave the chariot to Admetus.

Admestus gained the right to marry the woman of his dreams and made offerings to the gods in thanks. During his wedding night to Alcestis however due to not offering proper sacrifices to Artemis she summoned a number of snakes to his bedchamber which bit him and pumped him full of poison. Admetus only had days to live. Out of thanks for previous hospitality shown to him Apollo went to the fates and got them drunk enough to agree to a deal. If somebody was willing to die for Admetus they would be taken in his place. Admetus was thankful for the chance and assumed that his aging parents would be willing to die for him.

Unfortunately for Admetus no one was willing to give their life for him. Just as Admetus was getting ready to die his beloved wife Alcestis came and offered herself to Thanatos in place of her husband. At this Admetus attempted to go back on the offer but the deal was done and Thanatos was taking his beloved to the underworld. Thankfully Heracles had been spending the night at Pherae on his way to one of his labors and decided to thank Admestus for his hospitality by wrestling with Thanatos. Of course this being Heracles he won. The couple were reunited and because somebody technically died for him Admestus lived through his poisoning.

After his adventures wooing Alcestis, and learning to never forget a god when giving sacrifices, he went on to take part in a good deal of famous Greek adventures. He was a member of the Calydonian Boar Hunt and an Argonaut where he met fellow hero Atlanta a devout priestess of Artemis who he went to great pains to avoid at all times. He survived all those great trials and eventually went back home to his wife with whom he lived a long peaceful life.

That was the story of the body that is summoned as a Servant but the true being inhabiting it is Apollo the son of Zeus. Born to Leto daughter of the titans on the floating Isle of Delos Apollo and Artemis were born already brimming with godly might. They both became God’s of the bow and Arrow but while Artemis cared more for martial prowess focusing on the hunt Apollo focused on growth and culturing. He became the god of music, medicine, and herdsman.

This is not to say he was lacking in martial prowess though because when Zeus killed his favored son Asclepius Apollo returned the favor by killing the Cyclopses that had forged the weapon. In return for this act Zeus forced Apollo to one year of labor as a mortal which brings us to the beginning of this tale.

Personality:

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Bond:

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Creator Notes:
This was originally going to be a straight up Admetus sheet but when I was planning out the noble phantasm I couldn’t think of a good way to make a chariot with a lion and boar cool without it just being the gordian wheel. So I figured why not make a Pseudo-Servant and switched up some skills to make it fit. So now Apollo is possessing his former boyfriend and gets to hang around making art and junk.

**Shiki-pon** · April 20th, 2019, 02:21 PM

Might as well offer some commentary in a vain attempt to get some life into this thread (though the lifelessness is most likely something seasonal in nature).

Bloody Mary [Anne]: Not really sold on this one. I mean I guess the idea is functional, but the execution strikes me as a bit lacking. She also seems to have a lot of powers considering her relative minority. Since she seems to be at least partially related to Nursery Rhyme's dealy, it makes little sense for someone partially derived from that genre to be able to pull out more tricks than the living representation of said genre itself (at least in the form we've seen her in). And besides the blood, there doesn't seem to be an awful lot of 'Bloody Mary' in the sheet, and that's not a lot to go on.

Admetus: As for this one, I would first note that the ranks seem all over the place. For example, Artemis manifesting through Orion still sticks pretty close to the base parameters of the Archer class, so I don't think that Apollo as Admetus had such mighty deeds to his name that he deserves to surpass every single base parameter the Rider class has (by quite a bit, too). The 'EX-' rank also bothers me. Either its EX or it isn't (you could, for example, just flat out say that he can't use it at the moment without sticking a minus on it).
The NP also seems ironically similar to Gordius Wheel given your intent to avoid that, but that's the problem with chariot Noble Phantasms, I suppose.
Aside from that, the basis of a personality is there, but I think that it would deserve a bit more fleshing out. I'd also like to note that Apollo wasn't exactly averse to violence, though that might just be him trying to be at his best in front of Admetus.
I'm also a bit weirded out about what you've made his introductory line, as a Master can see the parameters of their Servant, and this one wouldn't really look like a "minor hero" as he says.

**massive_jojo_reference** · April 20th, 2019, 03:01 PM

Originally Posted by Shiki-pon

Might as well offer some commentary in a vain attempt to get some life into this thread (though the lifelessness is most likely something seasonal in nature).

Well we are nearing the page amount of the old thread, Create-A-Servant 3 might not be too far away

**cooldownnow** · April 20th, 2019, 04:20 PM

Originally Posted by Shiki-pon

I'm also a bit weirded out about what you've made his introductory line, as a Master can see the parameters of their Servant, and this one wouldn't really look like a "minor hero" as he says.

So the biggest thing is that Apollo isn’t in an Artemis situation he’s in an Ishtar situation. He’s not taking over Admetis and using him as a stepping stone ala orion he’s basically using Admetus as a host like Ishtar and Rin which is why he has Divine Core. As for the master knowing instantly he’s a powerful hero that’s why in bond 4 the master isn’t surprised in the slightest about the revelation. Apollo isn’t a good lier(Although he plays a pretty mean one) Lastly as for the personality Fate always takes incredible liberties with personalities. Like obsessive wife Artemis or literal alien Attila.

**Shiki-pon** · April 20th, 2019, 04:56 PM

Originally Posted by cooldownnow

So the biggest thing is that Apollo isn’t in an Artemis situation he’s in an Ishtar situation. He’s not taking over Admetis and using him as a stepping stone ala orion he’s basically using Admetus as a host like Ishtar and Rin which is why he has Divine Core. As for the master knowing instantly he’s a powerful hero that’s why in bond 4 the master isn’t surprised in the slightest about the revolution. Apollo isn’t a good lier(Although he plays a pretty mean one) Lastly as for the personality Fate always takes incredible liberties with personalities. Like obsessive wife Artemis or literal alien Attila.

And yet Ishtar still has only Gil-level parameters, despite having Divine Core at the same level as your Admetus. And one supposes a goddess of war (amongst other things) would have done things that might deserve higher parameters (maybe). And yet, so things are.

**cooldownnow** · April 20th, 2019, 05:04 PM

Originally Posted by Shiki-pon

And yet Ishtar still has only Gil-level parameters, despite having Divine Core at the same level as your Admetus. And one supposes a goddess of war (amongst other things) would have done things that might deserve higher parameters (maybe). And yet, so things are.

If that’s not a good enough excuse(and that’s all this is excuses because Type Moon definitely doesn’t play by the incredibly loose rules it creates) then just imagine that fame plays a role in it since everyone knows who Apollo is but not that many know about Ishtar.

**Shiki-pon** · April 20th, 2019, 06:28 PM

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Alternate Classes: Caster, Beast
True Name: Jahi
Alignment: Chaotic Evil
Origin: Zoroastrian Mythology
Armament: N/A

Parameters:
STR: C
END: B+
AGI: B
MANA: A+++
LUCK: E
NP: B

Skills

Noble Phantasms

Description

Lore

Notes

**SirGauoftheSquareTable** · April 20th, 2019, 07:13 PM

The Relationships section for this Servant would be a doozy. I wonder how she'd react to people like Shirou and Gilgamesh, who can both resist the blackening.

**Lodrago** · April 21st, 2019, 04:18 PM

Antoine Court de Gebelin.jpg
Faceclaim: Nobunaga the fool (Leonardo)

Class: Caster
True Name: Antoine Court De Gebélin
Alignment: Lawful Neutral
Origin: 18th century France
Likes: the Tarot, Fortune Telling, Independence, the ancient
Dislikes: those who stagnate
Natural Enemy: Franz Mesmer
Attribute: Man
Armament: A tarot deck
Catalyst: Any simple deck of tarot cards will do, as all tarot have been touched by his influence

Parameters:
Strength - D
Mana - C
Endurance - D
Luck - C
Agility - C
N.P - A+

Class Skill:

Item Creation - C: The skill that allows one to manufacture magical items. At rank C, Caster can use this skill to create decks of cards that could be used for minor cartomancy, as well as granting himself a mode of attack

Territory Creation - B: The skill that allows the creation of a special territory advantageous to one as a magus. At this rank, Caster is able to create an area similar to an academy where one can experiment or learn new skills

Personal Skill:

Knowledge of the Ancient - A: Antoine was a man who truly adored the ancient world and saw its influence everywhere. depending on how ancient a noble phantasm or hero may be, Caster may be able to deduce the true name of his opponent.

Clairvoyance - B-: A skill that improves one perception and can give limited sight into the future. Caster was the man who pioneered the art of tarot reading, but that form of reading is difficult to interpret for even the most seasoned veterans. As such, Caster is able to tell future events, but they will be interpreted vaguely.

Occultism - D: A skill denoting ones proficiency in occult practices, allowing the performance multiple rituals and minor acts of magecraft. Because of the time he came from, Caster is much less resourceful than more ancient mages.

Noble Phantasm:

A Portal to an ancient world: Le Monde Primitif.
Type: Anti-Unit - Anti-Army
Rank: A+

Caster's use of tarot sublimated as a Noble Phantasm. Caster is able to utilize any of the twenty two major arcana in various ways, changing them into attacks, enhancements, or summonings. the level of power changes as the arcana ascend, as does the mana cost. These cards can only be used once, and careful consideration is necessary before activation. These cards are fundamentally condensed mysteries, but instead of springing from legend or history, they are created by Casters imagination and his assumptions on the ancient world. Due to their unique nature, they are uneffective against those who have actually lived through the ancient world, specifically those from ancient Egypt or Babylon. They are, however, as affective as any other noble phantasm against servants and people from the common era, becoming stronger as the individual is younger. Each of the major arcana have differing effects, each of these is listed below

Le Mat: The greatest and weakest of the arcana. Meant to be bestowed upon those Caster deems the protagonist, this noble phantasm does not offer any advantages at first, but as the gifted one progresses, they will gain immense power.
Le Bataleur: For a limited time this card can artificially bestow magic circuits upon someone, giving them the abilities of an average mage. Those that already possess magical circuits will have their quantity increase.
La Papesse: Grants an individual temporary resistance against curses as well as divinity of rank E
L'Impératrice: Grants a weak shield emblazoned with an eagle, protecting from minor attacks, of course this won't hold up to most servants
L'Empereur: Immobilizes a small selection of individuals as all must bow before the emperor.
Le Pape: Summons a beam of light from the heavens to incinerate enemies below. This materializes as an attack similar to a E-ranked noble phantasm
L'Amoureux: Can take two individual and inflict them with charm
Le Chariot: Summons forth a chariot drawn by two sphinx. This chariot is not rideable, but rather is akin to a battering ram in the fact that it is a single charging attack. ranked as a D-rank noble phantasm.
La Justice: Caster selects two individuals, those closer to Lawful Good shall remain unharmed, but those closer to Chaotic Evil will be slashed by an invisible sword from lady justice herself.
L'Ermite: Grants the activator a lamp containing a six-pointed star that produces magical light. This light clears away all darkness and obstructers in its path.
La Roue de Fortune: After activating this card, a magnificent wheel appears behind Caster and begins spinning. Depending on how it stops, a creature will be summoned, either a sphinx, angel, a serpent, or a demon
La force: Grants a selected individual increased strength. For servants, this increases their strength parameter by one rank, for humans this can elevate their strength to the level of servants.
Le Pendu: Summons forth binding ropes that suspend the target by their feet. Only those willing, with strength of C-rank or higher, or those with specific skills may break the bindings, those lacking in these traits will be unable to escape until the bindings themselves expire.
La Mort: Releases a miasma of death upon activation. Takes form as a poisonous mist that drains the life out of everything it passes. Those without curse resistance would be made into easy prey.
Tempérance: an ability that repurposes liquids. Though this may seem quite underwhelming, it should not be underestimated, as it could be used to drain all the water out of a human or dump a river into a city.
Le Diable: summons a creature meant to be the modern representation of the devil. This materializes as a gargantuan demon with red skin, four arms, and six eyes. As a phantasmal creature, this can be equated to a B-ranked Noble Phantasm.
Le Maison Dieu: a veritable defense and attack. this ability summons a great tower that can be used to nullify one C-ranked attack as well as launch forth a volley of arrows. once the tower is attack by a C-ranked attack or higher, the tower crumbles.
L'Étoile: This ability places seven small stars in the sky, centered around one larger star. upon a secondary activation, the seven stars fall to the ground annihilating whatever they land on. Once each of the small stars have fallen, the largest star descends rapidly, crashing down with incredible force. each of the smaller stars qualify as a C-Ranked noble phantasm, but the largest star is considered A-ranked.
La Lune: A great and magnificent replica of the moon hangs in the sky, reflecting moonlight across the battlefield. Once activated, the moon will randomly call down pillars of moonlight that disintegrate whatever the light touches.
Le Soleil: Summons forth a replica sun. Though this bears the name of the sun, in reality it is just a massive ball of flame that incinerates everything nearby.
Le Judgement: The strongest offensive attack in his deck of major arcana. upon activation, this card summons a massive descending bolt of magical energy, encompassing a large area with a blinding light. This is considered an A+-Ranked noble phantasm.
Le Monde: The Strongest defensive ability in his deck of major arcana. Once activated, this card produces a protective barrier taking shape as an ancients world that Caster himself had never seen, but always exists within his mind. similar to a certain Rider's shield, this can be used as an ultimate defense against one attack.

Personality:
Antoine, at heart, is different from the many other servants that could be summoned. He doesn't see himself as anyone special, just another mundane figure from history, the true heroes in his eyes are the ancient saviors of humanity that he looks up to. He is nothing more than a fanboy for the more ancient servants, those like Ozymandias and Gilgamesh especially. He has a wish, but one that the grail itself need not grant. Caster wishes to meet histories greatest heroes from ancient times and the Age of Gods, those who have seen things he could never comprehend. Nothing grants him more joy than watching a battle between ancients, thus, he averagely takes part as a spectator, perhaps playing support to those he's taken a liking to. Though he is such a fan of those from ancient times, he has no interest in more modern heroes, deeming them unworthy of his time. This is most apperant in how he treats heroes who have come after him, those from the nineteenth century and on; he treats them as if they weren't even heroes, simply commoners history decided were important enough to remember. He has no specific care for his master, as he is just another human among seven billion, but he may take an interest in them if they share his obsession or become a hero worth remembering.

**RoydGolden** · April 21st, 2019, 05:06 PM

Gebelin: Pretty cool sheet. Tarot card symbolism shows up in a lot of popular media, so it's interesting to see the inventor of it as a Servant. I think "La Lune" would be more interesting as an ability to create illusions by reflecting moonlight instead of a generic big beam. That would fit the card's themes of illusion and mystery a lot better...

**TYPE-Lune** · April 21st, 2019, 05:19 PM

Antoine: Hm. It's mostly personal, but I always prefer when Servant kits are more streamlined. For me, this kind of Noble Phantasm has too many effects to really be interesting. Even something like Gate of Babylon rarely amounts to more than just really powerful swordspam. It's also pretty hecking strong, considering all the stuff it packs. So, I can't say I'm the biggest fan of that.

As an aside, since it's been a bit since I've hopped onto this thread, did anybody have any thoughts on the Beast I posted a page back?

**Shiki-pon** · April 21st, 2019, 05:43 PM

Originally Posted by TYPE-Lune

As an aside, since it's been a bit since I've hopped onto this thread, did anybody have any thoughts on the Beast I posted a page back?

Not really sure what you were going for with Endurance being A++++ since a triple plus appears to be the stated maximum (with EX above that). Also Icarus as a Beast just doesn't work for me (Sol or no). Boundlessness as an Evil of Man also doesn't seem like the kind of boundlessness Icarus was going for.
The sheet does have some some interesting concepts to it, mind you, but I feel like they might've worked better with another figure. Not sure who that other figure would be, but Icarus doesn't seem to be it.

**Cataquack Warrior** · April 21st, 2019, 09:26 PM

Originally Posted by Shiki-pon

Might as well offer some commentary in a vain attempt to get some life into this thread (though the lifelessness is most likely something seasonal in nature).

Bloody Mary [Anne]: Not really sold on this one. I mean I guess the idea is functional, but the execution strikes me as a bit lacking. She also seems to have a lot of powers considering her relative minority. Since she seems to be at least partially related to Nursery Rhyme's dealy, it makes little sense for someone partially derived from that genre to be able to pull out more tricks than the living representation of said genre itself (at least in the form we've seen her in). And besides the blood, there doesn't seem to be an awful lot of 'Bloody Mary' in the sheet, and that's not a lot to go on.

Wasn't my best work, I'll freely admit. Thank you for the constructive criticism.

I am aware that Nursery Rhyme already sort of covers Alice in Wonderland, but I interpreted Nursery Rhyme as representing fairy tales/children's stories in general, with her exact focus depending on her summoner's tastes. So if there was a character from a children's story that stood out, he/she could feasibly exist as a separate Servant.

But the Queen of Hearts is a lot more obscure than other potential stand-alones like Mother Goose or Cinderella, so I had to get creative. Hence why I mixed her with Bloody Mary; I thought that the parallels to Queen Mary's bloody reign and how Wonderland has a bit of association with mirrors created a decent link (plus, I liked drawing on how the White Rabbit mistook Alice for "Mary Ann". That said, as you pointed out, the two halves of the legend didn't mix together entirely well.

As for power, I was trying to keep Bloody Mary relatively balanced. I kind of envisioned her as a paper tiger, someone who depends on her blood and illusions to overcome foes. If you can pierce past the bloody lies to the truth, Bloody Mary is nothing but a ghost of a memory who can easily be overcome. Didn't quite work out that way in practice, though, given your feedback. If I made it so that her personal blood supply was limited (maybe any that she doesn't take from others has to be sacrificed from her own mana reserve?) and maybe took out a skill or too like Royal Prerogative, would that help make her abilities reasonable?

Anyway, thanks again for the feedback.

**Historia** · April 22nd, 2019, 12:30 AM

So, I'm going to post these WIPs here, because I'd like second opinions and trust you people (gasp). Out of these, which looks like it'll fit a Ulster Red Branch warrior like Celtchar mac Uthidir more?

Celty

34 · April 22nd, 2019, 01:04 AM

1st Ascension, 2nd Ascension, 3rd Ascension, Final Ascension

All good and fitting. Personally, I prefer the 4th one.

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**Spartacus** · April 22nd, 2019, 01:08 AM

2nd look the most balanced, I think.

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