Create-A-Servant 2

**kiwi** · December 9th, 2019, 11:14 PM

this is a goofy one

CASTER of SONG

Lore

Skills

Noble Phantasm

**RoydGolden** · December 9th, 2019, 11:33 PM

Pretty fun sheet. I take it 'Rebel at Heart' is basically his form of Nature Of A Rebellious Spirit? Also, there seems to be an incomplete sentence at the end of his NP.

That aside, any thoughts on my Marfisa?

**cooldownnow** · December 10th, 2019, 01:41 AM

Royd: I love your Marfisa sheet. The Noble Phantasms were pretty well done. I'd say yours was a step above my own Marfisa sheet. I'm normally not a fan of the whole brother sister love thing but the tragedy angle you put on it worked really well. Armed from Dusk till Dawn might be my new favorite personal skill. The idea of just a razor sharp scan of the area is such a fun visual to imagine.

**NMR-3** · December 10th, 2019, 05:21 AM

John Lennon beat his wife.

**kiwi** · December 10th, 2019, 01:40 PM

people make hitler sheets and you gonna come at me for this?

**RoydGolden** · December 10th, 2019, 02:17 PM

Originally Posted by kiwi

people make hitler sheets and you gonna come at me for this?

I mean most Hitler sheets don't exactly make him out to be a good guy, so that's not a great example. It would've been better if you pointed out that, say, most of the Paladins of Charlemagne would probably be huge Islamophobic bigots by modern standards, or Cu Chulainn outright raped Aife in the original myths. Overall if we limited ourselves solely to making Heroic Spirits of figures who were 100% inarguably good people in their lives/legends, there'd be a pretty limited list to choose from, especially the further back you go from modern times.

**NMR-3** · December 10th, 2019, 03:35 PM

Originally Posted by kiwi

people make hitler sheets and you gonna come at me for this?

I'm just saying, if you wanna write about someone you'd best investigate their negative traits as well. Especially more modern people, since there's so much more documentation about them. It's like writing about OJ's impressive football career without acknowledging the murder.

EDIT: Also, I do think the Hitler shit is weird. It's mostly just "haha the Lance of Longinus lol" and Charisma or whatever. They're boring as hell and I'm looking askance at everyone who makes one of them.

**Shiki-pon** · December 10th, 2019, 04:05 PM

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Alternate Classes: Rider, Shielder
True Name: Thrasyboulos
Alignment: Lawful Good
Origin: Greece (5th century BCE)
Armament: Spear, shield

Parameters:
STR: B+
END: C
AGI: B
MANA: D
LUCK: B
NP: B

Skills

Noble Phantasms

Description

Likes: Democracy as an ideal, civil discussion
Dislikes: Unnecessary warfare, oppressive rulers
Talents: Thundering voice, military coordination
Natural Enemy: Lysander

Lancer’s true identity is Thrasyboulos, the Hero of Democracy.

A student of Pericles, Thrasyboulos is a calm and reasonable military man. As a defender of Democracy, he hates those who would place themselves above others. To bring such individuals down, he prefers to ally with others in order to further prove the strength of the masses. He also dislikes direct combat, and would rather talk things out than fight.
However, Thrasyboulos also possesses unsavoury qualities. He has a keen nose for cutthroat politics, and follows similar principles even amongst honored heroes, pitting them against each other and reaping the benefits of their battles. Though also seeing them as people, when thinking in terms of warfare, he regards others as assets, detaching himself mentally from them in order to ‘use them properly’, as he would term it. Despite this, he might apologize for particularly callous actions, but he will never hesitate to press an advantage when one presents itself.
Thrasyboulos places great value in reason, and as such respects the great thinkers and military minds among Heroic Spirits. He has no interest in fighting skill, however, other than in potential allies, and holds that temperament is what defines a warrior. He himself is cool under pressure and pliable to changing circumstances, and holds those of like mind in high regard. Despite the rules of Athens’ democracy, Thrasyboulos doesn’t hold anything against women, acknowledging that the world has changed since his era. He does, however, find the idea of female warriors perplexing, and tends to refer to them as Amazons despite their origins.
Thrasyboulos serves his Master loyally, though he regards them as an equal rather than as a superior, with both bringing useful skills into the alliance. He is likely to try and seek out another Master to fight alongside should his prove too focused on their own station. Of course, it is possible for him to grow impressed enough with another that he would willingly place himself under their rule.
Thrasyboulos’ wish would be to undo the damages caused by Sparta during the Peloponnesian War. In other words, he wishes for prosperity for the Delian League, with Athens at its head.

Lore

Thrasyboulos was a supporter of Athenian democracy who rose to prominence late in the Great Peloponnesian War and then helped revive Athenian power in the aftermath of that war. Almost nothing is known of Thrasyboulos's background or early life.
In 411 the Athenian democracy was overthrown and replaced by the oligarchy of the Four Hundred. The main Athenian fleet, which was then based at Samos, quickly emerged as the main source of opposition to the new regime. Thrasyboulos and Thrasyllus were amongst the main leaders of this opposition. They helped fight off a takeover attempt by local oligarchs, and then convinced the Athenians within the fleet to swear an oath to maintain the democracy and continue with the war. A general assembly of the fleet then removed those amongst the generals who were suspected of supporting the oligarchy. New generals were then elected, including Thrasyboulos.
The newly promoted Thrasyboulos played a part in convincing the fleet to pardon and recall the controversial Athenian leader Alcibiades. Thrasyboulos then commanded the ship that carried Alcibiades back to the fleet.
Thrasyboulos then led a small fleet of five galleys towards the Helleespont. He joined up with Thrasyllus, and commanded the right wing of the Athenian fleet at the battle of Cynossema, where his attack helped win the battle.
He was sent to gather money from Thasos, and rejoined Alcibiades and the main fleet just before the battle of Cyzicus. During that battle, he was given the task of attacking the Spartan camp on land, and was hard pressed before reinforcements were sent to aid him. The battle ended as a crushing Athenian victory but the Spartans were saved from worse by their Persian allies.
In 407 he was given command of thirty ships and sent to Thrace, where he restored Athenian control over a number of rebel cities. He was also elected one of the year's generals, alongside Alcibiades. He was then caught up in Alcibiades's fall from grace. Alcibiades left his fleet to visit Thrasyboulos at Phocaea. While he was absent, his deputy fought and lost the battle of Notium. Alcibiades realised that he would be very vulnerable if he returned to the fleet, and decided to go into exile. Thrasyboulos was removed from his command, but did remain with the fleet.
He was a subordinate commander at the battle of Arginusae, most famous for the execution of several of the victorious Athenian generals in the aftermath of the battle. Thrasyboulos was said to have had a prophetic dream before the battle that predicted both the Athenian victory and the execution of the generals. During the battle, he served as a ship commander, and was one of two appointed to carry out rescues after the battle. Instead he returned directly to Athens to take some of the credit for the victory. The mood soon turned sour, and Thrasyboulos and his colleague Theramenes were put on trial after the commanding generals tried to blame them for the failures. This backfired, and in the end six of the victorious generals were forced to commit suicide. This probably played a part in the eventual Athenian defeat, both by removing some of their best commanders from the scene and by convincing other men not to risk taking up a post.
In the aftermath of the final Athenian defeat in the Great Peloponnesian War the Spartan leader Lysander set up a new system of government, with control held by a Board of Thirty, soon known as the Thirty Tyrants. Thrasyboulos went into exile in Thebes, but he would soon return and play a major part in restoring the Athenian democracy.
With Theban help he captured the fortress of Phyle. The tyrants sent a force to attack him, but were defeated. Thrasyboulos then went onto the offensive. First he defeated a Spartan force under Callibius that had been sent to blockade him at Phyle, and then he captured Piraeus, where he gained the support of most of the population. The tyrants sent out another army, but this was defeated at Munychia. A standoff now developed, with the democrats at Piraeus, and a new oligarchy in command at Athens, while the survivors of the Thirty fled to Eleusis.
The Ten called for help from Sparta, and an army led by Lysander and Libys was sent to put down the rebels. The Spartans inflicted a severe defeat on the democrats, but were then saved by the intervention of King Pausanias, who arranged an armistice with them. Envoys were then sent to Sparta, and a general amnesty was agreed. The exiles were allowed to return to Athens, while the surviving oligarchs fled to Eleusis. Most of the oligarchs were soon eliminated, and another amnesty agreed with the survivors, for which Thrasyboulos is given the main credit. Democracy was restored at Athens within a year of its apparent destruction.
In 395 Thrasyboulos proposed an alliance between Thebes and Athens, helping to trigger Athenian involvement in the Corinthian War. He then led an army to support Thebes, arriving at Haliartus in the aftermath of the battle in which Lysander had been killed. In 394 he commanded the Athenian continent at the battle of Nemea, an inconclusive Spartan victory in which the Athenians were defeated fairly early in the day.
In 390 he was given command of a fleet of forty ships and was sent to help the democratic elements on Rhodes. When he reached the area it became clear that the pro-Athenian democrats were fairly secure across most of the islands, while their enemies would be difficult to eliminate from their last strongholds. Thrasyboulus decided not to risk an attack, and instead he moved up to Thrace, where he was able to bring the Odrysian princes Amadocus and Seuthes into an alliance with Athens. He then moved to Byzantium, where he helped restore democratic rule and an alliance with Athens. He then moved south, and captured Methymna on Lesbos. He then continued south, but was killed in his tent while camped near Aspendus on the Eurymedon River when the locals reacted to his men's raids into their territory.

Notes

**Kabalisto Koga** · December 10th, 2019, 05:51 PM

You have presented us with some good servants Shiki-claus !(sorry for the pun beforehand )

I quite like Tuskaloosa as he is a Indian srvant also your Red Horn Archer(ess) of the contest is nice here have i three Question :First can you remind of which native language :He-Pųjoge-Šujera is coming ?and second how would they view my Cherokee-Caster as she is a fellow North American native Hero ?and what would be the personality ,skills and noblephantasm of Red Horn in her other classess (sorry i know that you are Focusing on one class but im here curious)

Helen of Troy:Quite interesting i must say with your Concept of she being a True Ancestor but it is a good Explanation that she is referred in some accounts also a Demi-Goddess or a Nymph due to her Beauty ,in my oppinion.

Suryavarman II: A Servant that has Angkor Wat as Noblephantasm i can only say nice ! here again what Mount would he has as Rider and am i asume Right that as Archer he would has a Rain /Water based Noblephantasm Arrow ?

Khwāja Shams-ud-Dīn Muḥammad Ḥāfeẓ-e Shīrāzī:Interesting a Sufi before the self-torturing sober Phase of the religious practice .would have some suggestions for other Caster candidates under the Sufis perhaps i got you say "do the Research self " but sometimes only a hint would be enough.

Heinrich Kramer:I were honestly surprised to see him as servant but you have made quite good Concept of his Noblephantasm,am i asume Right that he "fights" in the grailwar by the Manipulation of oothers Right(can he actually fight directly by himself and if so in which way?) ?and i find it honestly crazy that this Psychopath has a Caster like could he evole a sort of Magecraft or would get the Maleficarum some Grimoire like abbillities ?

and have you seen my last Servant of the Titanic ? I would be curious About you Evaluation ?and due to i have seen in your Red Baron servant that you had a fanfiction idea how far have you thought that idea out and i would be glad if you would take a look at my Fanfiction i have already three chapters out .

**King of Padoru** · December 10th, 2019, 06:04 PM

Originally Posted by NMR-3

I'm just saying, if you wanna write about someone you'd best investigate their negative traits as well. Especially more modern people, since there's so much more documentation about them. It's like writing about OJ's impressive football career without acknowledging the murder.

EDIT: Also, I do think the Hitler shit is weird. It's mostly just "haha the Lance of Longinus lol" and Charisma or whatever. They're boring as hell and I'm looking askance at everyone who makes one of them.

To be fair, Servants are greatly affected by the image people have of them, and John Lennon is rarely criticized for being a wife-beater. I don't think is strictly necessary to add that aspect into the sheet, though it would make his character less one-dimensional.

**RoydGolden** · December 10th, 2019, 06:57 PM

"The land and sky belong to no one. Will you join me in creating a world of freedom,
brother
Frère
?"

Servant Berserker:

Appearance:

Source

True Name: Jean-Jacques Rousseau

Alignment: Chaotic Good(?)

Alternate Class: Caster

Strength- A
Agility- B+
Endurance- A+
Mana- A
Luck- B
NP- A+

Personality

Class Skills:

Mad Enhancement- E+
A Skill that characterizes the Berserker Class. Raises parameters in return for a loss of sanity and/or hindering mental capacities. Berserker was a passionate man prone to mood swings and fits of rage in life.

His variant of Mad Enhancement doesn't impede Berserker from thinking or expressing himself eloquently. But whenever the topic of "civilization" comes up Berserker must pass a Luck check or else fly immediately into a violent rage, ranking up his physical stats. Summoned in the modern age when industrial civilization is virtually inescapable, Berserker can be said to be constantly constraining himself.

Personal Skills:

Ideal Man- A
A Skill similar in nature to Innocent Monster. The Servant's appearance and attributes have been distorted to conform to the "ideal" they extolled in their literary/philosophical works. It differs from Innocent Monster in that these alterations are wholly embraced by the Servant, letting them obtain their longed-for ideal.

In Berserker's case, based on his writings on the "Natural Man" his body has been warped to match the image of a "savage yet noble barbarian", brawny and garbed only in animal skins. His parameters skyrocket accordingly, attaining ranks in Strength, Agility, Endurance and even Mana (thanks to the original humans living in the Age of Gods when the air itself was saturated with Mana) that would be utterly impossible for him to normally possess.

Berserker himself is amused by how his appearance differs so drastically from what it was in life, but cheerfully accepts it. After all, having exalted the superiority of the natural man, it's only fitting he take such a form as a Servant. At least so the man himself says. Unbeknownst to Berserker his mentality has also been influenced by this Skill, making him far more opposed to "civilization" than he was in life.

Robust Health- C
A Skill made up of anecdotes of "not receiving a wound on the battlefield" and "never becoming sick even once since birth". It is also a composite Skill and includes Poison Resistance. Endurance is ranked up and attacks received have their damage reduced. Berserker was noted as an exceptionally healthy and robust man in life.

At one point, wracked by a urinary infection, he quickly recovered after deciding to ignore the advice of his doctors and let nature take its course. Berserker's conception of the Natural Man, a man who's perfectly healthy by living in harmony with nature, has further bolstered his ranking in this Skill.

Nature Of A Rebellious Spirit- C
The temperament to never remain at one location and never embrace a lord. A wandering star that does not have capacity to be king nor of finding one's own king. Negates the effects of Charisma at the same rank or lower. Berserker fiercely decried the government and Church, seeing them as robbing man of his natural liberty.

Mental Disorder- D+
Denotes that one's mind has fallen ill. It differs from the Mad Enhancement normally held by the Berserker Class.

Berserker was never diagnosed with any mental illness in life, but he was prone to fits of paranoia where he'd accuse his close friends of secretly plotting against him. His friend David Hume described Berserker as "a man stripped not only of his clothes, but of his skin", exceedingly sensitive to the insults and betrayals of the world. This Skill isn't normally active but when Berserker is feeling emotionally pressured, he'll start to hear phantom voices in his mind taunting and jeering him. This stokes Berserker's Mad Enhancement and can make him lash out in a rage at even his closest allies.

Noble Phantasm

Homme Naturel

Unspoiled Perfection Of The Primordial Man

Rank: A+

Type: Anti-Unit (Self)/Anti-Civilization

Berserker promoted the idea that the original state of man was neither good nor evil, but their society and environment determined which way people would lean. According to him, man was born free and proud, living in an unspoiled wilderness in which natural goods were shared freely with everyone rather than being hoarded by a select few. The rise of government and private property destroyed this fragile equalibrium, asserting that some men held the right to rule over others. Berserker advocates that the goal of his philosophy was to return civilization to the state of nature, an idyllic state where men could live freely without being shackled to tyranny.

In the Berserker Class, the concept of the State of Nature manifests in a constantly active Bounded Field wrapping Rousseau's body. Embodying the concept "rejection of civilization", it deteriorates any weapons used against Berserker in proportion to their modernity.

A wooden spear or stone cudgel wouldn't be affected at all by this ability, being tools used by the primeval man. An iron sword would start to rust and dull faster when swung against Berserker, suffering a higher chance of breaking from "accidental" wear and tear. A flintlock pistol or cannon would often sabotage when fired at Berserker. Modern technological weapons like a machinegun or sniper rifle would suffer the worst effects, having its shots crumble to ash the moment they enter the Bounded Field.

When Berserker invokes the Noble Phantasm's true name, this defensive function is exchanged with an offensive one. Berserker turns to the skies and lets out a mighty primal roar, spreading the concept "rejection of civilization" to his whole surroundings. Immediately technological items in the vicinity will start breaking down, and others will begin to "regress" into more suitable/primitive forms like; a gun turns into a throwing spear, a car to a chariot, a modern cellphone becomes a stone tablet, etc.

This roar also exerts a Mental Pollution-like effect on the minds of any humans who hear it. This manifests in awakening the target's latent rebellious urges and bringing them to the forefront. Those affected will be overcome by the urge to rebel against any resented authority figures in their lives, from an oppressive government to a tyrannical boss or overly controlling parents. Even Servants can be affected, driven to turn against their own Master if their bond is weak enough. Needless to say, invoking this Noble Phantasm in a populated area like a city could easily result in mass anarchy.

As a form of mental interference, it can be resisted by Skills and Noble Phantasms that specialize in blocking out such things. Chaotic-aligned individuals are also affected more strongly than Lawful ones.

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So this is probably the last sheet I'll be posting here for a little while. I've also had this guy in my WIP folder for a few months now but just got the inspiration to finish writing him up. Of course I was inspired by Tsukasa from Dr. Stone with his personality but I tried to go for my own take as well. Had to take some artistic license with Rousseau's RL philosophy to make the concept work, but I made an attempt to justify it with his Ideal Man Skill.

As usual, comments and critiques would be welcome. Thanks for reading!

**Shiki-pon** · December 10th, 2019, 06:58 PM