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    Redemption By Steel

    I'm back, following "Shenanigans"/therapy.

    And I felt like continuing some old stuff, so reposting chapter one (Previously in drabble thread), posting chapter two immediately afterwards.

    Please note that I haven't written anything in months. So grill me as hard as you can, because constructive criticism.




    Redemption By Steel
    The 12th meeting, part 1
    Written by: NAHTCUW


    X=X=X=X=X

    It was really cold outside. She really hated the cold, too.

    But, at least she was someplace nice and warm.

    “Barkeep, could you bring me another beer?” Rin lazily said, leaning on the counter.

    “You look like you’ve had enough, actually,” The gruff man replied, from his side of the counter. He was a tall, Russian fellow with shoulders as wide as a bull’s, a mighty beard that tickled his chest but surprisingly short hair, which was gradually turning grey.

    “Hey, I know when I’ll have had enough. Just get over here and pour me another one.”

    The big hairy man replied by grunting loudly, but made his way over to her, grabbed her mug and refilled it anyway.

    “Thank you,” she said, more as a formality than anything.

    He just grunted in return, and went back to his stack of dirty mugs, which he wiped clean one by one with an even dirtier rag.

    Rin, on her part, took a sip out of her newly filled mug.

    Life on the run was not an easy task. Maybe, she reflected, she shouldn’t have tried to build the Zelretch sword so quickly.

    And if she knew a failed attempt would have earned her a sealing designation, she wouldn’t have even got close until she was certain.

    Which was why now, she was in Russia, in some deserted, dinky old inn, drinking beer from a mug that was cleaner than the rag used to clean it.

    At least fate was being consistent, she scornfully thought as she took another swig.

    It was the same everywhere, after all. Fate pisses on everything she had done, everything she tried to do.

    Her sister died, at her own hands no less. Her first crush was forever broken, turned into some ‘justice machine’. The one man she had trusted with her life was gone. The first apprentice she had taken, to try to make up for things, left her after she knew the full truth. And now the clock tower, the one place she thought would accept a cold-blooded magus like her, had thrown her out because of some tradition.

    Some cold blooded magus like her. She almost burst out laughing at the bad joke.

    At least from here, things could only get better. With that in mind, she took another swig.

    Behind her, she heard the door open, accompanied with the tinkling of bells. She mumbled something intelligible, insulting the bells and their annoyance.

    “What can I do you for, miss?” The barkeep energetically said, giving the newest visitor a warm smile Rin hadn’t seen before.

    Such blatant favoritism, she thought while taking another swig. She didn’t turn back, though, because she didn’t feel like being especially social.

    “I’d like a room for the night, and something to drink,” The new person said, with a hesitant accent accompanying her English, which sounded vaguely Japanese.

    Someone from japan just happened to be passing through town. Rin started thinking this might be a hook into her most recent meeting with fate.

    She really didn’t want that.

    She took another swig of her half-empty mug, and resolved herself to stay silent.

    “Sure thing! Now, what would you like to drink?” The barman enthusiastically said, putting down the mug he had been holding.

    “Got anything warm, which isn’t coffee?” The newest person said, taking a seat on the customer side of the counter. Rin silently thanked this new person for sitting away from her, though she did steal some sideway glances.

    The newcomer was wearing a large, brown, and recently re-opened trench-coat. Her hands were covered in dark gloves, and she was wearing light blue jeans and a plain grey shirt. Her face wasn’t exactly visible, as she had a heightened collar. However, a small tuque could be seen sticking out, which was red.

    She didn’t look too special.

    Rin let her eyes wander a bit, until they settled on the luggage this new person was carrying. It was a simple duffle bag, but strapped to it was a large object wrapped in cloth. It looked vaguely familiar in size, but Rin couldn’t place it anywhere in her memory.

    She forgot about it for a second, and concentrated on her drink again.

    “Hot, but isn’t coffee? Well, I do have some tea, or some hot chocolate. Anything there interest you?” The barkeep said, not noticing Rin’s quick scan of the newcomer.

    “Some hot chocolate would be nice.” The traveler said, getting comfortable on her new chair. For a moment, Rin thought their eyes locked, but she quickly discarded the thought.

    It wasn’t like she was recognizable, anyway.

    She tried to take another swig of her mug, but found it empty. She found it high time to retreat to her room, in that case.

    “Alright, I’m out. Good night,” she casually told the barkeep, dropping a few bills on the counter.

    “About damn time. Here’s your key.” He threw her a small keyset, and she walked to the nearby stairs to find her room upstairs.

    However, the newcomer spoke up.

    “Hey, why don’t you stay down here and keep me company?” She said, turning to face Rin. She had a devilish smile, one that spoke only of fun. It seemed very familiar to Rin.

    “No thanks, I’m really tired.” Rin simply answered, before walking off to her room.

    She wasn’t interested in any new adventures. She’d had her fill for a lifetime.

    X=X=X=X=X

    “Was it something I said?” She asked the bartender, as the other person climbed the stairs up to her room.

    “I don’t know. She did seem awful brooding the entire time, though.” He simply replied, handing her a big cup of hot chocolate, as ordered.

    “Ah, thanks.” She said, before taking it and blowing on it a bit. After taking a few sips though, she felt like starting a discussion. “So, do you get many visitors during times like these?”

    “During snow storms in Russia? Any inn makes a killing at times like these. I have to admit though, you’re the first I’ve seen come so late. Most of my clients are already in bed at this time,” He calmly answered, used to conversing with lonely patrons. “What took you so long, that you came in after midnight?”

    “That’s a secret, I’m afraid.” She replied with a devious smile. After a moment of her drinking some hot chocolate though, her smile left her and she became more serious. She rummaged through her pants, and took out a blurry picture of a man, taken from behind. “Have you seen this guy? Fairly young, already has hair getting white, is kind of a machine?”

    “Hm…” The bartender took the picture in his massive hands and brought it closer to his face. “Was he some Asian like you two?”

    “Yeah, he is. Wait, two?” It was her turn to sound a little surprised, that time.

    “Yeah, that girl you just tried to hook up with? She was Asian too. Don’t blame you for not noticing, her English is damn near perfect.”

    “Damn near perfect, huh? That reminds me of someone,” she said nostalgically, until she remembered the present. “Wait, you aren’t getting out of this. This guy, you seen him?”

    “Yeah, I have. Last time I saw him was four days ago. He paid cash, made very little trouble, and disappeared after he left. Only reason I recognize him is the hair and the Asian thing. We don’t get many of your people here,” he casually said, and she didn’t take any insult.

    “So, you have no idea where he went?” She tried, already expecting a failure.

    “None, sorry. I try not to make trouble, yeah?”

    “Yeah, it’s fine,” She said, releasing a sigh. It looks like she wasn’t going to find him any time soon, then. She took another sip from her hot chocolate, and her entire face seemed to relax as she hummed with delight.

    “So, you’re out hunting some guy down? That’s pretty romantic,” The bartender casually mentioned with a smile, once he was sure there were no liquids in her mouth.

    She blushed furiously, followed by a small yelp of surprise.

    “What? No, no, it’s not that at all! I don’t like him that way, it’s just…” She regained her breath, and calmed down. “I just owe him a bit. He saved me when I was in a little rut.”

    “Hm, well, I didn’t really think he was the hero type. I guess you can’t really judge a book by its cover.”

    “If only you had any idea…” She simply said, while she shook her head. Almost as a late reaction, she noticed she was still wearing her tuque. She removed it, revealing a head of healthy brown hair, and placed it down on the counter next to her drink.

    A drink she hastily drank more of.

    “So… about that other Asian visitor, got any dirt on her?” She asked mischievously, putting her drink back on the counter.

    “Nothing much. She’s just passing through, has a healthy appetite for alcohol and snaps back pretty hard,” he said with a shrug.

    “Does she have a name?” She said, in between taking small sips of her hot beverage.

    “Probably. She didn’t tell me, though. Why?” He casually answered, taking up a mug and finding himself another rag.

    “Hm, she looks familiar somehow.” Her eyebrows furrowed and she brought a hand under her chin, leaning ever so slightly on it. The expression looked very pensive to the barkeep, like someone desperately trying to solve a puzzle.

    “Well, maybe she just has one of those faces,” he shrugged, before his face became a mix of surprise and disappointment. “Speaking of, she took the last room. Unless you’re willing to bunk with her, you’re out of luck.”

    “Yeah, I’d be fine bunking with her. Would she be, though?” She said, hastily finishing her hot chocolate.

    “Ask. If you don’t come down in twenty minutes, I’ll assume everything’s alright. If you do, I’ll drive you down to another place nearby,” He offered kindly, giving her an apologetic smile. “It’s the first room on the right when you get up, by the way.”

    “Hm, thanks. I’ll go check.” She said, picking up her hat and shoving it into a coat pocket. She reached down and picked up her bag and the covered object that was with it, and made her way up the stairs.

    Once faced with the hallway, she followed his trusty directions, and made directly for the room to her right. A quick look at the floor, or rather the small gap between the floor and the door, was enough to tell her the lights were still on.

    Good. Reasoning with a disgruntled, sleeping girl was harder than it seemed.

    She knocked on the door, and in records time she heard shuffling, and heavy steps. The door opened fully, revealing an Asian woman with short, shoulder length black hair, wearing simple pants and a turtleneck shirt.

    “Yes, what do you want? I already told you I wouldn’t keep you company,” she said angrily, her tiredness apparent in her voice.

    “Geez, don’t be like that. The barkeep just told me he made a mistake with counting the rooms, and that I’d have to share. Care to help a soul tonight?” She said with a playful smile, which obviously grated on her host’s nerves. Oops. “I don’t take much space, and you can have the bed.”

    The woman just looked at her a moment, as if weighing her options or sizing her up, then sighed heavily.

    “Fine. You get the couch,” She said, and retreated back into the room, leaving the door open.

    “Thanks!” The brown haired one clearly said, before walking into the small room. It had a bed, a couch, and a television that she could tell didn’t work. Along with that, there was one small door which probably led to a bathroom.

    It was cozy, at least.

    She walked over to the couch, dropped her bag at its feet, and sat down. She took off her heavy winter boots, and lay down.

    In her experience, her coat made for a very good blanket anyway.

    “Good night,” she simply called out, and she closed her eyes. She had slept in worse places before anyway.

    The last thing she heard from her temporary roommate was a loud sigh.

    And so, Mitsuzuri Ayako fell asleep quickly, her travels weighing down on her.

    X=X=X=X=X

    “Wait, if this magus stuff is so secret, then why did you just up and tell me?” Ayako clearly asked, one day while Rin was in the middle of giving her a lecture.

    “Well… you asked. And you were very adamant,” she said, but Ayako knew there was something else behind it.

    “Oi, speak up. That’s not the reason, and you know it. What happened?” Ayako asked, too curiously.

    “Look, I started teaching you because I felt like it, okay?” Rin loudly exclaimed, catching Ayako off-guard. “Just don’t question it.”

    “Does this have to do with Emiya? You said yourself he did something pretty bad.” Ayako kept going, resolved to make it at the bottom of it all.

    Rin had been acting oddly. Coupled with Sakura’s disappearance, Emiya dropping out and falling off the face of the planet, and the disappearances of many people in town, she made the connection.

    Ayako had just up and asked her exactly what was going on, and didn’t stop until she knew everything. Or at least, once she knew some of it. Rin had told her about magic, about the grail war, and explained that Shirou and Sakura were masters in it. She did not, however, mention their specific fates.

    And then, when Ayako had not-seriously asked her if she could learn magic, the answer was an odd ‘sure’.

    It didn’t add up.

    “No, Emiya did nothing wrong,” she said, a tortured look on her face. “It’s complicated.”

    “Well, maybe if you tried explaining it, it’d seem less complicated.” Ayako tried again, crossing her arms over her chest.

    “No, it’ll still be complicated.” Rin stated, before turning around and making her way to her basement door. “Just keep practicing that basic spell until I come back down.”

    “Wait, Rin!” Ayako called out, but before her words caught her teacher, she had already left the basement.

    Rin had been acting too oddly. She wasn’t talking about it, either. And then there was the priest who came by every now and then, who never really helped.

    Last time he visited, as soon as he left Rin practically burst into tears.

    Still, she couldn’t be forced to talk.

    So, Ayako sat down on the basement floor, and activated her paltry, weak circuits. A metaphorical bowstring was pulled back and released, and she started.

    The basic spell warmed her hands, until finally a small flame popped out. She controlled her breathing, her flow of prana, and the flame did not try to lick her fingers this time.

    X=X=X=X=X

    The dream was interrupted when the sun decided to wake Ayako, by shining brightly in her face.

    “Well, at least the snow storm is done…” she lazily said, pushing herself in a sitting position on the couch. She rubbed her eyes, cracked her neck, and stretched a bit, before finally putting her boots on and standing.

    She looked at the bed, and a huge lump revealed the fact her roommate was still sleeping.

    Not a morning person, it seemed.

    As quietly as she could, she went into the bathroom. She stole a look at herself in the mirror, and grunted unhappily.

    The tuque had turned her hair into a complete mess.

    Now that she thought about it, it had been getting a bit long.

    She shrugged the thought off, and took out an elastic. Few moments later, she was sporting a ponytail, and ready to go eat some breakfast.

    Once again, as silently as she could, she exited the room. The loud sound of gathering people greeted her, and she decided to swiftly get down and get breakfast before there was no more left.

    Meanwhile, Tohsaka Rin just snoozed along.

    X=X=X=X=X

    “And you just let him leave?” Ayako asked angrily, her anger catching up on all the events she had just heard of.

    “What was I supposed to do?! I…” Rin’s voice trailed off, an angry expression on her features. Rather, it wasn’t angry but irritated, or frustrated. Like a child’s, when forced with a math problem they don’t understand. “I didn’t know what I was supposed to do… I just wanted my sister back…”

    She fell to the ground, on her knees, and tears began falling without her control.

    “I didn’t mean for things to end up like this…” Her voice choked under the weight of her sobs, and nothing she said next was intelligible.

    Ayako, on her hand, had no idea what to think.

    The truth behind what happened to Sakura, behind Shirou’s descent into a cold, calculating persona, everything had been revealed to her.

    Including Rin’s ugly wish. Including the fact she was willing to use the tainted grail, to kill so many people, just to get her sister back.

    It was pitiable.

    But it was also undeniably wrong.

    In the end, the cold, calculating monster saved them all from a sad, heartbroken girl. It was almost poetic, in a pathetic, unfunny way.

    It also explained things.

    Maybe by taking Ayako in and teaching her magic, she felt like she was trying to repent. But in the end, she wasn’t seeing Ayako doing the magic.

    In the end, she was just projecting Sakura on Ayako. She was just teaching the sister she should have had, through a person who was mostly unrelated.

    “Come on, it wasn’t really your fault.” Ayako said, her anger suppressed by Rin’s bawling. The sight felt wrong to her. “I mean, you were distressed, you had just been through some serious stuff. You can’t be blamed for that.”

    “But I should be!” Rin cried out, not against Ayako. No, she cried out against fate. Fate, that decided she would kill her sister, but then not die afterwards. Fate, that decided she wouldn’t pay for that crime in blood. “I damn well should be…”

    Ayako had no real answer to that. She didn’t know how to deal with someone in that state.

    She just stayed there, until Rin eventually cried herself dry. Not a word was spoken of it, ever again.

    Ayako kept going to Rin’s to learn, with a new goal in mind. Once the school year ended, though, she disappeared just like Shirou.

    No one really questioned it this time however. She had a good reason for disappearing, and with the money she had received from the insurance, everyone knew she’d be fine. They just figured she needed some time off, somewhere to recover.

    Her family was a casualty of the war, after all.

    X=X=X=X=X

    Rin woke up groggily, her usual morning habits coming back to bite her. Her head was clouded by her recent sleep, and her thoughts were clouded by the unhappy dream she just had.

    She should have never taken Ayako as an apprentice, even temporarily, if she had known that she would run off in search of Emiya.

    But she really had nothing left, and obviously wouldn’t want to stay with her. Rin should have seen it coming, in retrospect.

    She pushed herself off the bed, and clutched her head. A hangover was not the best way to start the day.

    She got to the side of the bed and got on the floor, her bare feet feeling the floor’s chill. A few more steps and she was in the bathroom, groggily looking at herself in the mirror.

    There were huge bags under her eyes, her entire body was sagging because of her tiredness, and her newly cut hair didn’t even reach her shoulders.

    Just like every morning since she ran from the association, she unhappily though, as she turned on the tap and splashed her face. It did little to wake her up or make the headache go away, but it was an old habit.

    She got out of the bathroom, quickly changed her clothes and put on her shoes, and made her way downstairs.

    She needed some coffee, desperately.

    X=X=X=X=X

    “So, how was your night?” The bartender, now innkeeper, asked, as he brought her a tray with a plate of omelets and bacon, along with a cup of coffee.

    “It was great. I’ve slept in worst places, so the couch was easy enough,” Ayako said, before she started digging in.

    “I’m still sorry about that,” he said, observing the busy room from his side of the counter. “The rooming will be on me.”

    “Huh?” She stared at him a moment, a ghastly look on her face. “No, no it’s fine. I probably would have slept on the couch anyway. I like getting up when the sun does, and it was in front of the window.”

    “No, this is me being professional. I promised you a room, but couldn’t deliver,” he said, pushing his chin up in a stubborn fashion. “You won’t pay.”

    “Alright, alright,” she said with a small smile. “Geez, what’s with me and running into nice guys.”

    “Well, maybe you’re just lucky,” he said, and Ayako donned a disbelieving expression. “Ah! There’s your roommate coming down.”

    Ayako turned her head, and surely enough the person she had shared a room came down the stairs. For the first time, Ayako could look straight at her without being tired, or in a rush for bed. Raven black hair, blue eyes… Ayako remembered now, why she seemed so familiar.

    She looked like Rin.

    Then again, Rin had no reason to be out in Russia, wouldn’t ever cut her hair, probably wouldn’t ever wear pants, and wouldn’t have gotten herself wasted the night before.

    She also hadn’t met Rin in ten years.

    So, she shrugged off the resemblance and went back to her breakfast. The eggs and bacon felt like a feast to her.

    However, the one seat which was still open was the one right next to her, and her roommate just fell on it.

    “Bring me coffee. Lots and lots of coffee,” she demanded, obviously not a force to be trifled with in the morning.

    “Would it kill you to say please?” The bartender said, pouring her a big cup of coffee.

    “Fine. Give me the coffee, please,” she said, a massive frown forming. He passed her the coffee, and she started drinking as soon as she got it.

    “Not a morning person?” Ayako said amicably, before taking a bite out of her bacon. That attracted her roommate’s attention, who looked ready to snap back. Instead, she paused for a moment, recognition in her eyes. “Hello?”

    “What are you doing here, Ayako?” Rin said in Japanese, her voice slightly hurt. Ayako, on her part, dropped her fork.

    So it was Rin after all. Ten years can really make a person change.

    Ayako regained herself quickly, and took another bite of her bacon before answering.

    “I’m doing what I always do. Hunting down Emiya, that is,” she said between mouthfuls. “What are you doing here though? I thought that after school, you’d be going to the clock tower?”

    Rin uncomfortably shifted, and took another sip of her coffee before answering.

    “I got sealing designated. I’ll go home to japan, pick up what I need, and make myself scarce until the association forgets about me.” She said, before sighing.

    “You do know they’ll be waiting for you there, right?” Ayako asked with an eyebrow arched. “It’s what I’d do, anyway.”

    “What you’d do…? What have you been doing anyway?” Rin asked, suddenly curious. “You left before you knew everything I could teach. I half-expected to see you dead on the news one day.”

    Just as usual, Rin was ruthless.

    “Well, when I lose Emiya’s trail, I do mercenary jobs,” she said, and a look of disbelief from Rin forced her to continue. “Well, after I left, I got lucky and met the right people. They taught me about being a mercenary and stuff, though probably for the wrong reasons.”

    Ayako shivered at the memory, but forced them out of her head to concentrate on the conversation at hand. Rin was there, right in front of her, for the first time in ten years.

    “So, you left and became a freelancer, huh?” Rin said, with bitterness in her voice. “I’m a sealing designee, you know. You’d get quite the reward if you took me in.”

    “Hey, I’d never do that,” Ayako said with an unhappy frown. “You’re my friend, and a damn good one too. I wouldn’t sell you out.”

    “You didn’t seem to have much trouble leaving me.” Rin said bitterly, chugging down her coffee. She waved the mug at the innkeeper, who hadn’t been paying attention ever since they started talking their home language, and he refilled it.

    “Really? You’re going to pull that card?” Ayako said, pushing away her empty plate. “Fine. You didn’t need me back then. You were probably worse off with me around. So, I left. I was going to eventually anyway, so I did a bit early.”

    “I didn’t need you? Without you around, it was just me and that damn fake priest. How the hell was I worse off with you around?” Rin asked angrily, after a healthy load of coffee entered her throat.

    “You were projecting Sakura on me.” Ayako stated, and Rin paled for a moment. “You were refusing to let go, to let the past be the past. I don’t really care what you think, that wasn’t good.”

    Rin had nothing to say, but hummed indecisively before turning back towards the counter. She kept drinking her coffee silently, and at a much slower pace. Ayako followed her example, and started drinking her own cup.

    After a long moment of awkward silence, Ayako decided it was high time to speak up.

    “They’ll be waiting for you at your home, you know.” She casually mentioned between sips.

    “You already told me. So what?” Rin snapped back, before waving her empty cup at the innkeeper again.

    “So, throw them off.” Ayako simply explained, and Rin stayed silent. She took the opportunity and kept going. “Stay away from your home until they give up. They don’t have the manpower to stay there too long.”

    “Nice plan. What am I supposed to do while I wait? Maybe make a snowman?” Rin sarcastically said while pointing a window to her right. Ayako just sighed at her behavior.

    “No, idiot. Come with me. I’d wager you need to meet Emiya more than I do,” she said, and Rin looked afraid for a moment.

    “No, I don’t think that’s a good idea,” Rin hesitantly said, looking away.

    “Just shut up and come with me. You need to face him, just not as an enemy this time,” Ayako said, before finishing her cup of coffee. “I think it’s something you both need, actually.”

    “It’s not that easy!” Rin answered rather loudly, getting her a look from the innkeeper. She said it again, in a lower tone. “It’s not that easy.”

    She was shivering. Not because of the cold, but because she was afraid. She was afraid of facing the remnants of her biggest, most monumental failure.

    She needed to get it over with, though. She needed to put it behind her.

    “Well, here are your two options. One, you go home and get ambushed by a combat specialist who’ll kick your ass and drag you to the clock tower. Two, you come with me for a while and face your past, or we lose Emiya’s trail and you get to go home a bit late anyway. There’s no real assurance behind us finding the guy, you know,” Ayako explained, and Rin’s defense seemed to weaken.

    “Really…?” She asked, her voice barely audible. “We might not find him?”

    “Yeah, really. Heck, last time I saw and met him, it was three months ago. He stayed around for maybe a week, but disappeared again.” Ayako said with a heavy sigh. “I couldn’t convince him to stop, not by myself.”

    “And you think I can stop him?” Rin said with an exasperated look. “I already tried, when I had a heroic spirit at my side. Look at how that turned out.”

    “Different circumstances. Just, come on,” Ayako said, getting up. “Get breakfast and pack your stuff. I’m leaving in half an hour.”

    Before Rin had any time to answer, Ayako had already gone off and climbed the stairs.

    “Innkeeper, get me another cup of coffee,” Rin demanded again, her expression sour.

    X=X=X=X=X

    Well, she thought, that had been rather nerve-wracking.

    Still, Ayako moved on. She took a quick shower, changed into clean clothes, packed her dirty clothes into one of the side-pockets of her duffle bag, and checked on her bow, which was wrapped in cloth.

    She unwrapped it carefully, and after carefully checking to see if the cold had affected either the string-less bow’s wood or the runes carved on it, wrapped it again.

    She was wasting time, basically. Half an hour had almost passed, yet Rin had not come up yet. That either meant she wasn’t coming, or she was going to pop up at the last minute.

    Both were equally possible, so Ayako just sat on the bed and waited.

    She waited until finally, her watch told her thirty minutes had passed. Rin was not coming.

    She pushed herself off the bed with a sigh, pick up her bag and started moving. Right as she was going to open the door however, heavy steps could be heard on the other side.

    And the door exploded inwards.

    “Fine! You know what? Fine! I’ll go with you, I’ll meet Emiya-kun, I’ll settle whatever needs to be settled, and then I’ll go home,” Rin half-shouted to a surprised Ayako. Between heavy breaths, she finished with, “are you happy now?”

    Ayako settled down, the door bashing giving her pause, and looked Rin in the eyes.

    “Yeah, I’m happy now,” she said with a smile. “Now, get your stuff packed. You’re late.”

    She said that, then moved past a surprised Rin into the hallway.

    “That’s it? After all that convincing, you’re just going to accept it that easily?” Rin said, looking rather disheveled.

    “What, you want me to make a big deal out of it?” Ayako said, on the verge of going down the stairs. “Well, sorry. Just get your stuff. I’ll be talking to the Innkeeper downstairs.”

    She walked down, and Rin’s mind fumed.

    She had forgotten how aggravating her old friend could be.

    X=X=X=X=X

    “So, you’re heading out?” The innkeeper asked, all while taking a stack of dishes to the back.

    “Yeah, we are. I have a question though.” Ayako said, pretty much prepared for the trip already. All she was lacking from her original attire was the tuque.

    “Yeah, ask away.”

    “Any news of danger? Like any rumors or anything, about some people being attacked, or something like that,” Ayako asked, leaning on the counter.

    “Danger, hm…? Well, we did get some news about some town to the north that recently got taken over by some dangerous folk. Police can’t touch them, because they have friends in the right places.” The innkeeper said, bringing one big hand to his chin. “They turned the town into a real rat-hole, now.”

    “Thanks, that helps a lot,” Ayako said, before pushing herself off the counter and back into a standing position. “Thanks for the room, innkeeper.”

    “Any time,” he said back, and Ayako walked off.

    Waiting at the door was Rin, carrying a single suitcase and looking vaguely disgruntled.

    “So, where is this field trip of ours going to start?” She asked, just as Ayako got to her.

    “North,” Ayako happily said, pushing the door open.

    “Okay… and why are we going north, in Russia, during wintertime?” Rin asked, following Ayako into the cold outside.

    “Because apparently, it’s extremely dangerous. Emiya’s bound to be there,” Ayako said, and Rin just froze. After a few moments of walking, Ayako stopped and looked back at her. “What?”

    “That’s seriously all you’re going on?” Rin asked, befuddled.

    “Yeah, it’s worked for me before. Emiya was here four-five days ago, and where he’d head is where he can do his justice thing,” Ayako stated, before starting to walk again.

    Rin just stayed put for a moment, mouth agape, until she followed her crazy friend.

    For a moment, she actually considered fighting an enforcer ambush instead of the haphazard task ahead.

    She was really, really hating fate at this point.

    X=X=X=X=X

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    X=X=X=X=X

    Rin rummaged through her bag a moment, and withdrew a bottle of vodka. Hastily unscrewing it, she brought it to her lips and took an unhealthy gulp.

    Ayako, on her end, was standing next to the black car which had ferried them most of the way.

    “Thanks for the ride,” she said to the driver, handing him a few bills for his trouble. He wordlessly nodded, and closed the door. Ayako stepped away, towards Rin, and the car started making the necessary maneuvers to run around.

    “So, are we supposed to walk the rest of the way?” Rin asked, as the car left the way it came. She looked around, and saw only a road made of snow, only distinguished from the rest of the landscape by its lack of towering trees.

    “Yeah, it shouldn’t take too long,” Ayako answered, already moving alongside the road, in the opposite direction of the car. Rin followed, albeit with some hesitance. “It’s only about twelve hours to the town, anyway.”

    “Twelve hours?” Rin said, her entire posture dropping dejectedly. “Remind me why that guy didn’t drive us all the way there?”

    “Weren’t you listening when I told you before?” Ayako asked, stopping a moment and looking back at her travelling companion.

    “No, I wasn’t. I was trying to get more sleep while we were still in the hot, cozy car,” Rin bluntly answered, making Ayako’s jaw drop. “What? I figured we’d be walking a while anyway, so you could tell me then.”

    “You’re impossible.” Ayako sighed, and started walking again. “He was just scared for himself. These guys have proven dangerous, and he wants to stay away if he can.”

    “Yeah, what are these guys doing anyway?” Rin asked, following her friend down the road.

    “Something about stockpiling drugs,” Ayako casually answered while walking, not even turning back.

    “Okay, that doesn’t sound so bad,” Rin commented, before her head shot up in realization. “Wait, it’ll take twelve hours to get there?”

    “Yeah, so?” Ayako asked, turning back to face the frozen-up Tohsaka.

    “Do you really expect us to keep walking, in the cold, until it’s past midnight?” Rin said, and Ayako drew back her sleeve to check on her watch.

    It was one-thirty in the afternoon.

    “Well, unlike you I was planning instead of sleeping. Driver told me that about eight hours in, there’s a fork in the road between the town and its quarry. If we just go walk straight behind that sign for about ten minutes, we’ll find a small hunting retreat in the forest. It’s not big but it’s shelter.”

    “So… we just start walking for the next eight hours?” Rin said, a skeptical look on her face.

    “Yes, we do. It’ll seem shorter once we get a pace going, and once or if we start talking,” Ayako said, before starting her walk forward again. Rin followed, sighing in the process.

    For the following minutes, neither said anything. The only sound was the soft scrunching that accompanied the meeting of boots and snow. Slowly, and surely, minutes became hours. Ayako walked out in front, and Rin followed quietly, occasionally withdrawing her bottle of vodka. Eventually, that fact started bothering Ayako.

    “Hey, just how much are you going to drink, anyway?” Ayako asked, not stopping her march. Over the two hours they had walked, Rin had halved her bottle of vodka. “That stuff isn’t exactly good for you.”

    “I’ll be fine. I’m not drinking too much at once,” Rin answered, slightly slurring. “And I’m using magecraft to alleviate the effects.”

    “Right.” Ayako said, frowning. Rin’s answer had hardly comforted her. Twice now, Rin had proven to be a heavy drinker, both at the bar and on the road.

    Ayako inwardly started hoping Rin hadn’t turned into an alcoholic. Given her traumatic experience, the freelancer could see it happening too.

    Ayako shook the thought off, and kept walking.

    Eventually though, curiosity reared its head in her mind again.

    “So, what’d you do to get sealing designated?” She asked, her voice sounding rather bored.

    “I… I tried to remake the jewel sword,” Rin said, slightly surprised by the sudden question.

    “No way! That jewel sword? Zelretch’s?” Ayako asked, suddenly interested. She turned to look at Rin, walking backwards all the while. “How did you even know how to make it?”

    “My family used to be apprentices to the old man,” Rin said, sighing. “He left us the blueprint. I tried making it on my own, but failed pretty hard. The result is this, basically.”

    “Damn, that sucks. At least you got out before they imprisoned you,” Ayako said, turning back to face where she was walking.

    “Alright, that was from me. Your turn,” Rin said, her curiosity not hidden at all. “How the heck did you become a freelancer?”

    “Well, that takes a fair bit of storytelling,” Ayako said, grabbing her chin with her thumb and index.

    “We have time. Plenty of it,” Rin stated truly and harshly, as she did with most obvious statements. Some things never changed.

    “Alright, I guess that makes sense. The first place I went, when I went looking for Emiya was where Taiga had told me his flight went to, which was Thailand,” Ayako explained, as she looked up at the sky. “When I was there, I showed his picture around, asked for Emiya. No one was, well, particularly helpful.”

    Ayako stopped talking for a moment, and simply kept walking with her eyes glued on the grey winter sky.

    “Yes, I can clearly see how it happened now,” Rin said, after Ayako’s pause became too long for her liking. “Thanks for clearing it up.”

    “Oh, shut up. It’s not something I like talking about.” Ayako stubbornly answered. “Anyway, I met this woman, an American with a crazy attitude, and she decided to help me.”

    “Wait, she just decided to help you? Like that?”

    “She was a little… whacko. Yeah, that’s the right word. She met me when I was showing Shirou’s picture around and asking for Emiya, and then she decided to help me because she thought what I was doing was romantic. And because she was bored, and thought I was cute or something.”

    “Okay… and she taught you how to be a mercenary?” Rin asked uncertainly, noting the bizarre, nonchalant tone of voice Ayako used to list the woman’s reason.

    “Among other things, like runes, firearms, explosives… that kind of stuff,” Ayako finished off, rubbing her temple with her hand. “She taught me everything that lets me follow Emiya. She even followed me around for a while, and was there the first four times I caught up with him.”

    “You caught up with him four times already? Then… why isn’t he here with you then?” Rin asked, surprise clear in her voice.

    “My goal isn’t to capture him, Rin. My goal is to convince him to stop, and I haven’t succeeded yet,” Ayako stated, her voice harder and more steeled than Rin had heard before. “Besides, I caught up to him eleven times, not just four.”

    “Wait… then why don’t you stop him by force?” Rin asked, like it was the most obvious thing in the world.

    “That wouldn’t solve anything. Shirou, one time I caught up with him, compared his mind to tempered steel, like a sword. Something forged for a specific goal. Unless I change that, unless I make him realize he isn’t just a machine, I won’t be able to save him,” Ayako said, with a saddened sigh.

    Rin said nothing, just hummed in approval, or reluctance, or something else altogether, and they both kept walking.

    Neither said anything for what felt like days, until Rin started mumbling the Beatles song here comes the sun under her breath. Ayako stole a quick look behind her, and surely enough the bottle of vodka was completely empty.

    Her eyebrows furrowed deeply, but instead of chastising her again, she simply started singing along.

    “Here comes the sun, and I say, it’s alright,” they both mumbled along, barely even in sync, both lacking musical talent.

    That’s how they spent their long walk, mumbling badly memorized songs at each other at the tempo of flattening snow.

    X=X=X=X=X

    “So, is this the place?” Rin asked, her hand carefully tucked into her armpits for warmth. She was wearing Ayako’s red tuque and her chin was as low and close to the rest of her body as it got. Her luggage was on the ground, next to her feet.

    “Well, looks like. The time it took to get here fits, too,” Ayako answered, looking rather comfortable in the cold and near-complete darkness. She had a flashlight out, illuminating a large sign covered displaying arrows and word written in Russian. Over one arrow was written ‘quarry’ and over the other was ‘warm hole’, presumably the town’s name. Behind the sign, like everywhere else that wasn’t roadway, was a dense forest.

    “Well, what are we waiting for? It’s cold out,” Rin remarked, while she started toward the sign, eager to get closer to shelter.

    “Patience, young padawan. The shelter isn’t going anywhere,” Ayako shot at her amusedly, but Rin didn’t get the reference or slow down, so she hurried after her after raising her hands and shrugging.

    True to the driver’s word, there was shelter ten minutes in. What he didn’t mention was how small the thing was. It was a shed, barely even seven feet long and five feet wide, and seven-ish feet tall. The door was thankfully unlocked, revealing an interior as small as its exterior indicated. Inside were a chair and a bunk bed, which displayed two beds separated by three feet of space.

    Rin, however, didn’t seem to care in the least and collected blankets from the beds. Before Ayako could even say anything, she was nicely wrapped up.

    After a minute of staring at Rin hastily rubbing her hands together, Ayako finally smiled and said, “So, I guess you can’t really handle the cold, huh?”

    Rin shot her a glare that could have killed cute, cuddly baby elephants, and Ayako raised both hands in surrender. She set her luggage onto the chair, drew another flashlight from it and threw it at Rin’s side.

    “I’m going to go check out the area. Get comfortable. Er,” She said while turning to face the door. She stepped outside, but before Rin was completely out of view, added, “If even possible.”

    She closed the door before Rin’s low grumble became intelligible.

    Her smile faded, and her mind started working, trying to properly figure out how to set her perimeter. She started by thinking how to spread out her spider’s web of runes, and how far she wanted them.

    So she got to work, starting by retracing her steps. The easiest territory for her to prepare would be the one she and Rin had already tread upon. Once she got far enough, to about two hundred meters, she started up.

    She drew a knife out of her boot and carved a rune on the nearest tree, at its base. The rune was a crude R, the ancient Nordic rune symbolizing a journey. Used in magecraft, it could be used to subtly ease change, to reconnect related objects or people or to protect travelers, Ayako’s intended effect.

    Magecraft was a conceptual thing, and runes were a perfect example. This rune was protection for travelers and nothing else, and as such could only be effective if the user was fully intent on leaving the protected area very soon, no more than a day. If the user had even the slightest doubt about that, the rune would fail. If the user did not leave within a sunrise and sunset, the rune stopped working and could not be recast on the same area by the same person.

    But Runes were even trickier than most thaumaturgy, as they were also a divinatory tool and embodied multiple concepts. This rune could warn a traveler of danger before the threat entered their protected area through divination, or could completely ignore possible threats if it helped reconnect related objects or people together.

    Runes were often a gamble. But they could not go against their base concepts, and protecting travelers was one of the concepts of the journey rune. Even if ignoring a threat could reconnect something, if ignoring the threat could bring danger to travelers then it was forced on a basic level to, at least, ensure the travelers were safe and sound, while also being forced to make it as likely as possible that reconnection was possible.

    Runes were unreliable and difficult to work with, which was why their use was shared only by few individuals.

    Ayako was one such individual.

    She carved the crude R in four easy strokes on another tree and kept moving, only slowing down to activate each one with a tiny amount of prana.

    A useful thing with runes was that they mostly used prana in the air, rather like ritual circles. For Ayako, who had very few, very weak circuits, that was what had made them catch her eye in the first place.

    She kept at her work for at least an hour, until she finished a large circle with the shed as its center, with a radius of two hundred meters. They would now be protected in some bizarre, unpredictable conceptual fashion.

    All she knew for sure that it was extremely unlikely she or Rin would die that night. Concepts could be overtaken by other, stronger concepts after all, and runes had their limits.

    With that sobering thought, she walked her way back to the shed, and opened it to find Rin sleeping on the lower bunk, wrapped up in all the blankets the shed had to offer.

    “Didn’t even leave me one, huh…” Ayako mumbled to herself, before removing her luggage from the chair to take its place.

    “I guess I have the first watch,” She said to herself, pulling an old cd player from her bag.

    X=X=X=X=X

    Four hours of assorted music later, Ayako was getting very, very tired.

    She shook Rin until she was awake, and then some for good measure. She remembered her old friend’s nightmarish awakenings well enough.

    “Hmmmgggrrrrr…” Rin hummed, with the grace of a semi-trailer truck. “What do you want, Ayako? Sun’s not even up.”

    “Your turn on watch, Rin,” Ayako gave as her only explanation. “Come on, up and at ‘em.”

    “Don’t want to,” Rin answered, and made to fall back down on her bed. Ayako caught her, however, and hoisted her over one shoulder. “Wait, what’re you doing?”

    Ayako said nothing, but opened the door and chucked the half-awake runaway into a nearby snow bank. A loud shriek and call for murder later, Rin was in Ayako’s face, an expression of pure fury on her features.

    “It’s your turn to take watch. Can’t leave it to the sleepy citizen, you know,” Ayako gave as an explanation, shrugging and smiling innocently.

    Rin said nothing, but her eyes could have gotten Lorelei Barthomeloi, Queen of the clock tower herself, to shut up and listen. At least for a few seconds, before she killed Rin for giving her that look in the first place.

    “Safety first,” Ayako said, before going to the bed and falling in it.

    Rin grumbled something rude, and went to sit on the chair, still warm from Ayako’s buttocks. She never really stopped grumbling, but Ayako found sleep eventually anyway.

    X=X=X=X=X

    She woke up what felt like a second later, due to the top bunk falling on her.

    She grumbled in dissatisfaction and wrestled free of the cot, bits of wood and springs. It wasn’t heavy at all, it didn’t hurt, but it was very annoying. Once free, she stood up to see Rin dozing silently on the chair. Annoyingly, she found a bottle of vodka at her side, one missing a fair bit of liquid.

    “How many of those did she bring,” she mumbled to herself, less as question and more as just plain annoyance in the form of words, rubbing at her head. Her ears were ringing.

    Her head shot up. A freak accident happened in the middle of the night, seemingly without reason, along with the absence of anything else that could wake her.

    Protected in some bizarre, unpredictable conceptual fashion, indeed.

    She unmade the straps on her bag and unwrapped her bow. She strung it with deft speed that could only belong to a professional, took a pack of arrows from her bag and headed outside. She couldn’t see anything from the entrance, but that meant nothing at all.

    She moved to a nearby tree and climbed. Climbing the shed would be too obvious, would make her too easy a target. And in the night’s thick shadow, no one could be looking everywhere.

    She waited. Whoever had crossed into the runes would be heading for the hunter’s retreat, no questions about it. All she had to do was wait for them there.

    A few minutes later, five men approached, near-impossible to describe in the darkness. They were spread out, making an abstract pentagon around the shed. They were all within line of sight of two of their team mates, and had dimmed flashlights attached to what could only be rifles of some kind. They used hand signals to communicate, and kept deadly quiet the entire time.

    They were professionals, Ayako realized without much surprise. Someone had talked, warned them of approaching danger. And the retreat was an obvious place to check for trespassers.

    She bit back a curse. She should have thought of this. She had been too public, in too public an area. It stood to reason the inn would have been watched, as a gathering area of sorts.

    They slowly approached the shed at a snail’s pace, and Ayako waited for her chance. She had to stop them before they got too close to the shed, but if she started too early the others would be too far to intercept once her actions forced them to act fast. And their fast acting would probably lead them to the shed for cover and, unexpectedly, a usable hostage.

    The closest man to her was around eight meters from her perch, and frequently checked up the trees with his muted flashlight. He checked them all almost systematically, from right to left.

    She was to his left, and there were two trees to his right before he would get to hers. She had to think of a plan, fast.

    But no matter what went through her head, it all came to once conclusion: as soon as she took down one, the two nearest would know. Coupled with that was that she had nothing to take them all down at once. If Rin were awake she could probably do it, but the brown-haired freelancer was on her own in this.

    Just as she thought this, a surprised yelp came from one of the men, the one on the furthest right from her. A bunch of snow had fallen down a tree, directly on him. All of the others focused in his general direction, reacting to the sudden outburst.

    Protected in some bizarre, unpredictable conceptual fashion, oh yes.

    Seizing her chance, Ayako drew her knife with her right hand and leapt down a few branches, then directly into the closest armed man. Her blade found the man’s neck, and bit through his scarf and skin, spilling blood. She let go of the knife and rolled, cushioning her fall, and her bowstring was already being pulled by the time her roll had completed.

    She let an arrow fly at the man to her left first, the only one not affected by her rune-helped distraction. The arrow pierced his chest and made him fall, and Ayako redirected her attention to her right. The man had probably heard her bowstring releasing, and was turning to face her.

    Another arrow was already notched, however, and the element of surprise was on her side. The arrow found lodging in his skull, with the cheap, cheap price of one eyeball. The man screamed as he fell, a brief shout cut short by his death.

    Short, but loud enough to alert his teammates in the dead silence that accompanied the night.

    Ayako cursed, and headed straight for the shed. She had no line of sight on the two last men, but she could get it. And this was no longer the time for subtlety.

    With a jump, an outstretched hand and a fast pull-up, she was on top of the shed. The men were back to back, looking around them with rifles raised and, Ayako suspected, safety’s off. One of them was still kneeling in the snow, obviously the one who had been assaulted by the tree. His eyes darted around, like a rodent trying to figure out where that weird noise came from.

    But they were looking around, not up. While they would have been looking on top of the shed as an obvious vantage point while they walked towards it, things had changed. They had been assailed, and panic held strong over training, as they scanned the area only at eye-level.

    Not as professional as she had thought, then.

    She drew her bow, aimed and released an arrow directly at the snow-covered fellow, hitting his neck. The other one turned around quickly, only for his last sight to be his dead comrade as another arrow struck his heart.

    Ayako looked around to see her handiwork, and after making sure none of them were moving she headed to her first kill and took back her knife. She then checked them one by one, looking for survivors. The first man she had shot was still breathing, muttering a prayer in Russian while clutching a cross in one hand. His other arm held his rifle, but didn’t seem to answer his commands.

    He was big, over six feet tall, and was sporting an open large black leather coat, with large snow pants that had suspenders keeping them in place. He had a wool hat, and a dark blue scarf wrapped around his neck. He looked like he hadn’t shaved in a year, his dark-colored beard reaching his chest, and his hair pouring over from the sides of his hat.

    “I’m sorry, I don’t speak Russian,” she said gently, putting her right hand on his forehead. She dropped her bow for a moment, and drew her still-bloody knife with her left.

    “милосердие,” he said, and Ayako understood only by the look in his eyes. Tears were welling up, and his lower mouth was shivering in a way that had nothing to do with the cold. It was the look of a man who didn’t want to die. She’d seen it often before.

    “I’m not going to kill you. Just, stay still,” She said, as she withdrew her hand from his forehead and pressed down on his chest. He squirmed, tried to move, but Ayako held him down while whispering shushes at him.

    She started cutting up his black coat, preparing him for when she’d remove the arrow. In her head, medical know-how popped up and helped her every step of the way, never drowned by the man’s screams as she removed the arrow.

    The entire time, she was muttering curse words that sounded too much like comforting shushes.

    X=X=X=X=X

    The next morning, they had hit the road early. Ayako walked in front, and Rin meekly followed, her eyes glued to the ground or to the surrounding trees. Their one survivor was left in the shed, bandaged, with food and fairly likely to survive.

    “Sorry,” Rin mumbled, after a while. Ayako stopped completely, and turned to face her.

    “For what?” Ayako asked, shooting an eyebrow towards the sky.

    Rin flinched, ever so slightly, but said, “well, it was my watch, and… I fell asleep. I screwed up. Sorry.”

    She said the last part looking Ayako directly in the eyes, which was an improvement.

    Ayako just stared at her for a while, not breaking eye-contact, until she finally sighed. “Look, don’t apologize. You’re used to sleeping full nights in an actual bed. I shouldn’t have expected you to be just fine with only a half-night’s sleep. It was my fault too.”

    “Well, sorry anyways,” Rin declared with an extra hmph, looking away. Ayako stared a little harder, eyebrows trying very hard to meet each other, until Rin noticed. “What?”

    “You apologize too easily now,” Ayako stated, expression unchanging. “I don’t know, I…I’m just not used to it.”

    “Well, things have changed,” Rin said with a sad smile. “I’ve screwed up, big. And I know that it won’t fix everything, or anything, but at least I can apologize. I can promise not to make the same mistake again.”

    Ayako smiled, a warm smile that Rin had never really seen on her. Before she could comment about it though, Ayako had dropped her bag, walked a couple of steps and hugged her.

    “H-hey, what’s this about?” Rin shrieked, squirming about.

    “Oh nothing, this archery captain is just glad to see her friend all grown up,” Ayako said, her voice warm and energetic.

    “Hey, you haven’t been an archery captain in a long, long time, you know,” Rin said awkwardly, no longer fighting the hug but not returning it, either. After a moment of awkward silence, Ayako spoke up again.

    “I’m sorry for leaving the way I did, Rin,” She said, and Rin let out a little ‘eh’ of surprise. “I should have left a note, or told you before I left. I still think I needed to leave to help you, but… I shouldn’t have done it that way. I’m sorry.”

    Rin stayed silent a moment, stunned by her stubborn friend’s apologies, but finally gathered her wits and hugged her friend back.

    “Apology accepted, Ayako,” Rin said, smiling while a small tear began freezing on her cheek. “But, you really didn’t need to give one.”

    Ayako broke the hug off, and her smile crept back onto her face.

    “No, I didn’t. But I did anyway. I owed you that much,” she said. “Now, let’s go find Shirou and let you two have the big talk you need.”

    Rin blanched, almost as if she had completely forgotten why they were travelling in snow hell in the first place.

    “Um, do we really need to find Shirou? I mean, I admitted to some things and apologized, you apologized, we’re closer than we used to be, so… successful expedition? Let’s all go home?” Rin almost begged, her face as pale as the snow surrounding them.

    Ayako never stopped smiling.

    “We’re on a streak of things that are good for the soul, Rin. We shouldn’t stop now,” Ayako said. “Besides, nothing’s really changed. I bet you apologized a whole lot before we bumped into each other. You still have to face Shirou, Rin. You need it. And he needs it, too.”

    The short speech, coupled with her friend’s confidence, seemed to bolster her somehow and while her face wasn’t completely bereft of fear, it seemed to have mostly steeled out.

    “Right. Right, I can face him,” She told herself, taking deep breaths. “And then… we can talk. Right. About… things.”

    Ayako put a hand on her friend’s shoulders.

    “Hey, you dropped your luggage. It’ll probably get wet,” Ayako said, and on cue, Rin realized she had dropped her suitcase. She fumbled to pick it up, holding it in shaking hands. Once it was all done, Ayako looked her dead in the eyes and let out a quick laugh. “Don’t worry about Shirou, Rin. I’ll be there for you.”

    Rin stared for a while, and then took in a deep breath, smiled, and said, “Okay, thank you.”

    They both started walking again, and this time, they only stopped again when they noticed the smoke rising up from their destination.

    X=X=X=X=X
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    Like the title says, anger counseling. Therapist said some things, and my dad cut me off from the internet until I went outside, met people, got a job, stuff like that. I did so, got a nice job helping senior citizens, met a bunch of cool people, went to the library to read things, and so on.

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    Not sure about that, but I was planning on writing a series called "Lorelei&!", which would basically be Lorelei dealing with some magus thing every chapter.

    Kind of like yotsuba&!, but completely different.
    That would be cool too, but she's not the only one who wants to see that Shirou/Lorelei stuff.
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    Quote Originally Posted by NamesAreHardToComeUpWith View Post
    Like the title says, anger counseling. Therapist said some things, and my dad cut me off from the internet until I went outside, met people, got a job, stuff like that. I did so, got a nice job helping senior citizens, met a bunch of cool people, went to the library to read things, and so on.

    After a month of working, I'm back.


    Feels good to be back, honestly. I had forgotten how much I enjoyed writing.
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    Quote Originally Posted by lhklan View Post
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    Deuxièmement, bon omake, mon ami.
    Omake? Quoi?

    C'est un deuxieme chapitre, pas un omake.

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    Quote Originally Posted by NamesAreHardToComeUpWith View Post
    Omake? Quoi?

    C'est un deuxieme chapitre, pas un omake.
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    Quote Originally Posted by lhklan View Post
    Désolé. Mauvais mot.
    Bof, ca va. Ca arrive, des fois.

    So what, apart from Lhklan, no one has anything to say at all about the second chapter?

    Do I suck that much?

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    Quote Originally Posted by NamesAreHardToComeUpWith View Post
    Not sure about that, but I was planning on writing a series called "Lorelei&!", which would basically be Lorelei dealing with some magus thing every chapter.

    Kind of like yotsuba&!, but completely different.
    This would be awesome.

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    NAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAMES! YOUR BACK!

    *ahem*

    So onto the chapter themselves.

    I can't really comment on the first chapter besides the fact I think it was a snippit you did for Beam's Birthday and stuff. It was actually nice to read again.

    Onto the second chapter itself.

    I was really liked the beginning part of the chapter, with the walk to the hunting retreat and then telling each other what happened. I think one thing that kind of confused me, but also really interested me was hearing about how Ayako became a freelancer and what not. I guess kind of because I expected a little bit more detail in there a bit. Also the crazy American women felt a tiny bit like a, what was the word? Deus Ex Machina? I don't know. I'm not internet savvy. But it really interested me because oh god, now I want to know the adventures of Ayako the freelancer with the crazy American women.

    Oh and small mistake I saw here.

    “Okay… and she taught you how to be a mercenary?” Rin asked uncertainly, noting the bizarre, nonchalant tone of voice Ayako used to list the woman’s reason.
    The bolded word was what you forgot I think.

    The fight seen in itself was interesting, but I was a bit confused here. Were the a part of the enemy, or just hunters? Also the transition to Rin and Ayako talking seemed a tiny bit awkward. But the talk between the two was interesting in itself.

    All in all, I think the chapter was pretty good, just a few small things. And it's good to see you again.
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    Quote Originally Posted by NamesAreHardToComeUpWith View Post
    So what, apart from Lhklan, no one has anything to say at all about the second chapter?
    I don't really have anything constructive to say, but I like it so far and think the idea is pretty interesting.

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    Quote Originally Posted by The Sylentnight View Post
    NAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAMES! YOUR BACK!

    *ahem*

    So onto the chapter themselves.

    I can't really comment on the first chapter besides the fact I think it was a snippit you did for Beam's Birthday and stuff. It was actually nice to read again.

    Onto the second chapter itself.

    I was really liked the beginning part of the chapter, with the walk to the hunting retreat and then telling each other what happened. I think one thing that kind of confused me, but also really interested me was hearing about how Ayako became a freelancer and what not. I guess kind of because I expected a little bit more detail in there a bit. Also the crazy American women felt a tiny bit like a, what was the word? Deus Ex Machina? I don't know. I'm not internet savvy. But it really interested me because oh god, now I want to know the adventures of Ayako the freelancer with the crazy American women.

    Oh and small mistake I saw here.



    The bolded word was what you forgot I think.

    The fight seen in itself was interesting, but I was a bit confused here. Were the a part of the enemy, or just hunters? Also the transition to Rin and Ayako talking seemed a tiny bit awkward. But the talk between the two was interesting in itself.

    All in all, I think the chapter was pretty good, just a few small things. And it's good to see you again.
    Sup night, how's it going?

    The murrican lady will get her part, if ever I do another story in this setting. I have other meetings that could be written, after all, and she has a part in four of them.

    She just had very little to do with this one, which is more about Rin facing her fears and Ayako Ayako-ing. An introduction of sorts into what Ayako and Rin have become, and the rest will fill itself out with time and more writing.

    Which is to say, not too relevant this time, will be explored when relevant.


    About the forest people, if they were just hunters they wouldn't be approaching with rifles bared and surrounding the building. Ayako just made a judgment call. And as Author, I declare that those were, in fact, bad guys.

    And thanks for pointing out that mistake. Going to fix right now.

    Good to see you too, bro.

    EDIT: @malgos: Mwokay, I can accept that.
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    I really have nothing much to say on this one, honestly. It was pretty cool from what I remember, but not my main interest for your drabbles.



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    Quote Originally Posted by RadiantBeam View Post
    I really have nothing much to say on this one, honestly. It was pretty cool from what I remember, but not my main interest for your drabbles.
    Honestly, for some bizarre reason, this was thew only thing I could really write once I got on.

    The other stuff, I just sort of stared at the screen for a while and drew a blank.

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    Quote Originally Posted by NamesAreHardToComeUpWith View Post
    Honestly, for some bizarre reason, this was thew only thing I could really write once I got on.

    The other stuff, I just sort of stared at the screen for a while and drew a blank.
    B-But I want my delicious Shirou/Lorelei student/teacher relationship with an inappropriate age gap! D:



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    Quote Originally Posted by RadiantBeam View Post
    B-But I want my delicious Shirou/Lorelei student/teacher relationship with an inappropriate age gap! D:
    I'll see what I can do.

    But remember it has been a while, and I have forgotten some of the plans I had in store for them.

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